Alright, so, I was into the concept of Alice in Wonderland, which I think this is based off of, right? I hope so -- I never saw the new movie, but I think I know enough to actually comment on the story -- if I'm wrong, then, eh, doesn't matter, it's still a piece of writing.
Hatter made me giggle, I'll be honest, by the end of the piece of writing I was laughing, he was just, all together, an enjoyable character. It takes a lot to get me to honestly -like- a character enough for me to comment about them in a positive manner, so you wrote him pretty well, or he was so odd I just enjoyed him, I don't know.
I would -actually- like to see something like this expanded or continued. Mainly due to Hatter -- since this was such a short piece, you showed everything quite well, even if things were a bit too simple for my tastes, but it's alright, I -can- get past that, and Hatter helped me do that. Did I say I adored his character from what I read of it? Yeah, well, you're going to hear it again, sorry. :<
Since you said in your journal, and from what I saw, you did delete your other stories, which is a shame, I would have read another one, or commented on your journal but I decided to hunt down a story of yours and comment on it. I actually liked this piece, so good job, honestly. I just didn't like how short and simple it really was -- but like I said, I could get past that. So, good luck and happy writings with other pieces. <3
Hatter made me giggle, I'll be honest, by the end of the piece of writing I was laughing, he was just, all together, an enjoyable character. It takes a lot to get me to honestly -like- a character enough for me to comment about them in a positive manner, so you wrote him pretty well, or he was so odd I just enjoyed him, I don't know.
I would -actually- like to see something like this expanded or continued. Mainly due to Hatter -- since this was such a short piece, you showed everything quite well, even if things were a bit too simple for my tastes, but it's alright, I -can- get past that, and Hatter helped me do that. Did I say I adored his character from what I read of it? Yeah, well, you're going to hear it again, sorry. :<
Since you said in your journal, and from what I saw, you did delete your other stories, which is a shame, I would have read another one, or commented on your journal but I decided to hunt down a story of yours and comment on it. I actually liked this piece, so good job, honestly. I just didn't like how short and simple it really was -- but like I said, I could get past that. So, good luck and happy writings with other pieces. <3