August 22nd, 2011 at 04:17pm
Layout was awesome, I have to say. It matched and I loved the denim-background kind of thing. The colours worked really well.
This story just made me giggle. I absolutely loved the ‘pee her name in the snow’ thing. It’s so typical teenage guy-ish, but then he went and helped with her bags so it made him seem not so gross. XD
I like how short it is and how well it flowed, though some sentences seemed maybe too long. But because it’s a drabble and I liked it so much, there isn’t really anything to criticize...
Well, I’m just gonna say then that I really loved that! I didn’t find any mistakes and it was written so well.
(Sorry this comment is so short...I don’t really know what else to say!)
What an adorable layout! :D I love the picture.
I love the first line. It was just so weird it couldn’t help but be attention-grabbing.
This is probably the best short story I have read that is about love at first sight. Even though I think love at first sight is just way too corny a concept, the crude way that the narrator expressed his feelings made me like it and made me think it was possible. I thought there was a nice balance all throughout the story.
Awww, I love the fluffiness! I really enjoyed reading this and I think it has a lot to do with how you wrote it. Congratulations on winning second place!