This was good. I also liked the background. Could have given more detail in some places like why she was doing this and who he and them were though.
June 10th, 2009 at 10:22pm
I really liked it, everything. How the past recollections tied in with the things that were going on so perfectly.
I think you could've really milked the suicide thing, you know. I mean adding all these emotions and stuff. :tehe: You didn't say why she did it, though. Were you aiming to give the impression that she was numb?
I would have liked it if you'd spaced it out into more paragraphs at the ending so kind of add some drama. But that's just a personal preference, doesn't really matter. :file:
I do love reading stuff by you, especially your drabbles. Although I am staying away from slash and stuff. :shifty
Great job with this, Sharona. :arms:
