oh my, honestly, i thought this was going to be something where you didn't relate it to the song and you just got off topic. and, well, i was COMPLETELY wrong. i loved the story line, i also loved how you included the lyrics in dialogue, that's some brownie points, no one else has. during the first chapter i thought this was going to have nothing to do with the song, but then it all clicked in. i kinda thought her past had something to do with it all, but i didn't think he'd be the guy that walked out, i kinda had a feeling he was the guy who was also in the car crash, that hit their car. but of all of the entries i've read for my contest, they only made me have a tear or two, this legit made me start crying. the ending was amazing, i just can't express how much i loved this. but, like i told you before little girl, lol, you should've proofread it, there were quite a few mistakes; spelling mistakes, using the wrong form of the word, sentence fragments but no run-on sentences, which is good. sometimes i did get confused because the surroundings would change, but that's okay. despite these mistakes, it was truly amazing. i'd give you five fucking stars. but anyway, good job and good luck in the contest.
July 24th, 2011 at 11:18pm