June 7th, 2012 at 02:18pm
Hi, I just read the story Poison. It was very different, but good. I sat here trying to figure out exactly what was wrong with the girl due to your style of writing. That's not bad. It leaves the reader picturing multiple things that could have caused this.
Your layout is very pretty and has a simple look to it. Only problem, and it may be my computer, the color of the writing is slightly hard to read. Its bright against the white, but it may be my computer. On the whole, this was a very good story and I really enjoyed reading it.
simple stories with simple happenings, similar to the poems but with more meaning, if that's what you want to read out of it...
i also found it very hard to read because of the light text color, though. might want to change that, it's the only fault i've found