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  • MadolcheMisu

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    Its been awhile since I've read this. Probably the first draft you wrote. I really enjoyed it then, but this is fantastic! I can vaguely remember the other, but this one feels more whole. The details are better and I don't know if I remember Chapter 2 being in the first one? I could be wrong. I remembered some of the story line as I re-read things, but this is great. I intend to finish it when I have more time. :)

    All in all, your writing is brilliant. I'm in love with Brent, naturally, and Ry is a mostly likeable character. Keep on writing!
    July 27th, 2012 at 08:19pm
  • akanevampire19

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    Chapter 5 was really good, don't change it. =) Update soon. ^.^
    July 20th, 2012 at 04:48am
  • Isn'tSheLovely?

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    I like it. :) But some of the comments give stuff away... 3:
    July 11th, 2012 at 05:04am
  • Cupcake Violence

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    So i um yeah I'm crying lolol i started bawling when she quit choir and i hate her sister and i still feel like crying cause shes in so much pain yeah i love your story :) please update soon? :P
    March 18th, 2012 at 05:56pm
  • golden sparrow

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    This story is awesomely amazing. I love the way you write, it really pulls me into the story and makes me feel what the characters feel. And your characters by the way, are also really awesome. The way you portray Rylan is awesome, I feel like I can relate...except with the whole Aven thing...cause if that was my sister I think I would have gone bat shit on her way earlier haha. And oh my GOD I love Brent, he's aaammmaaaazzzzzziiiinnnnnnnngggggg, the way he walks into the bathroom to make sure she's okay....I swear I just about melted in my seat haha. And then when they go and skip school ^.^ awesomeness.

    I like how you make her best friends so quirky and totally relatable because that makes the story just that much lovable. When I first started reading this I thought, okay, so the girl's got cancer, but no. It's her MOM. D: I swear, when she saw her mom crying into her dad, I cried so hard. My own my was sitting across from me like ... O.o. Haha, and I might have kept crying if her face hadn't made me laugh so hard.

    And what's with the Tyler kid :o I can't decide weather he's fucking with her or not and I kind of don't want him to be because he was so sweet (except for those first moments with all those cheesey lines and what not) but I also want him to be a major ass (or at least a jerk) so that she can get with Brent. Ugh! Even if he is the sweetest guy in the world! Her and Brent should be together haha, I don't care about Tyler..psht...Tyler who....

    Haha, anyways, now that I'm done spazzing at you, and leaving this ridiculously long comment I'm gonna say one more time...LOVE THE STORY.

    .Peace.
    January 6th, 2012 at 02:55am
  • akanevampire19

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    Still not happy with the situation! I was like: "Hey Brent is back! Woohoooo! =D" And then they fight =( Update soon! =D
    September 27th, 2011 at 11:02pm
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    Oh God...... That is so not fair! Poor Brent... I bet he will be destroyed... ='(
    September 3rd, 2011 at 10:54pm
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    Awwwww I knew Brent would make things better! =D What Rylan saw in his eyes was looooveeeee! =D But he was disappointed she said best friends.... =/ Update soon! =D
    August 31st, 2011 at 01:12am
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    I hate Aven too! She's so heartless!!!! I hope Brent can help her realize she doesn't have to give up her dreams...
    August 24th, 2011 at 01:26am
  • JustUnRemember

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    :'''( OhMuhGods. That was so upsetting. A/N Why, they never did anything to hurt you, I just don't get why people have bug/insect/spider problems.
    August 23rd, 2011 at 10:59pm
  • JustUnRemember

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    N'awww, it was incredibly sweet, but not sickening. And I don't think you even have to ask if we love Brent, he's just that type of person that it's hard not to love...
    August 19th, 2011 at 03:52am
  • MadolcheMisu

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    I love Brent! I will comment a bunch if that means I'll get to read more sooner :) Haha, but really I love it. I love the plot so far and I'm interested to see where this goes. The writing has a nice flow too. Not a whole lot of boring. I'm enjoying it!
    August 16th, 2011 at 04:42am
  • JustUnRemember

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    That chapter was really strong. You got across the whole feeling really well. The last comment from Brent really made me smile, sometimes the rules need to be broken in order to do the right thing.
    August 16th, 2011 at 03:55am
  • JustUnRemember

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    Wow, this chapter really makes you think hard about mortality. I know how you feel, my grammy battled and survived cancer, a wonderful woman I considered an aunt passed away a few years ago, losing her battle, and when I was little my mum had cells that tend to be precursors to cancer. I'm glad your mom has made it through and is in remission.
    August 9th, 2011 at 06:20am
  • MadolcheMisu

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    I'm really enoying this so far. I like Brent the best, but Rylan's struggle for perfection is one that reminds me of how I used to feel and sometimes still do; that failure is not an option. It's a terrible feeling too. Makes you put a lot of unneccessary pressure on yourself. I can't wait to read more :) Good work.

    P.S. One part that I didn't like is in the second chapter: “You’ve grown up so much,” Joel concurred. I really don't think the "concurred" is necessary. Just try to rephrase the sentence that follows or put said because I think that just makes it awkward. I'm no professional, that's just my opinion. That's all though. Besides that, it's lovely.
    July 29th, 2011 at 07:00am
  • akanevampire19

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    I like it. I just want to read more =)
    July 29th, 2011 at 03:10am