July 13th, 2013 at 10:38am
This layout is so nice, I really like how all of the colors compliment each other well. Oranges, peaches, blacks and yellows I don't see story layouts using them a lot so it's nice.
This was a little disturbing because I thought it was going to be fluffy! I love how in the end you revealed it had no intention on letting her leave, even if she had fulfilled all of his requests, she would still stay with him. I think that's what actually kidnappers would do, say they would let them go but don't, so it's good to see it in writing.
One thing I saw in here that could be fixed was this part, Why do you look frighten... I think frighten should be frightened. But otherwise this was a good read. c:
This was a little disturbing because I thought it was going to be fluffy! I love how in the end you revealed it had no intention on letting her leave, even if she had fulfilled all of his requests, she would still stay with him. I think that's what actually kidnappers would do, say they would let them go but don't, so it's good to see it in writing.
One thing I saw in here that could be fixed was this part, Why do you look frighten... I think frighten should be frightened. But otherwise this was a good read. c: