Bare - Comments

I think the layout you made for this piece is good. Nice and simple and pleasing to the eye. I think that's all a reader can really ask for from a layout, right?

Oh gosh this was really a blow. I didn't know what it was going to be about when I clicked into it but the situation really sucks. I hate how it seemed like whoever had rehearsed and made sure everything was all ready and set and I guess after she/he and whoever had had sex or something, you know, they were just rejected and the feelings weren't the same. It really sucks. I can only imagine how crushing that probably was, and how much shame and regret they would be feeling. This was really well written, nice job.

I think the layout you made for this piece is good. Nice and simple and pleasing to the eye. I think that's all a reader can really ask for from a layout, right?

Oh gosh this was really a blow. I didn't know what it was going to be about when I clicked into it but the situation really sucks. I hate how it seemed like whoever had rehearsed and made sure everything was all ready and set and I guess after she/he and whoever had had sex or something, you know, they were just rejected and the feelings weren't the same. It really sucks. I can only imagine how crushing that probably was, and how much shame and regret they would be feeling. This was really well written, nice job.

First off, I really like the banner; it’s simple but I like it. I love stories like these, where you sort of incorporate the reader by saying “You” and “Your” and such. There are so many lines that I really adore because the flow of it all is so great. You definitely captured the feeling of being embarrassed and wanting things to turn out right in just a few paragraphs and I think that is a great skill. You don’t have to drag it on to get the right effect on your readers; it was just short and sweet and very intriguing. I’m going to have to check out more of your writing (:

That was amazingly beautiful. The layout was beautiful, the words you used were beautiful.
I'm very much in love with this. Your descriptions are perfect, and so are your use of words. I love how you could just put an entire room with detail into my head, then crush it down, make it fade into something different within just one sentence. I love it. Not much else to say about it.

Your layout and the banner was simple and beautiful, much like this drabble.
Wow. That was scary and amazing.
Nicely done, good luck!