Anything can Happen in Disney World - Comments

I found your story not to long ago and just finished reading it, and I love it so much! I hope you come back sometime soon and update!

I love your story! It's a really good concept-idea thingy. I love the way your story flows and there isn't any strange unexplained things like some other stories. There's just a few things..

“Oh, uhm yea sure. Jonathan, these our my cousins, Henry, Brady, Brianna,”

You used our when you most likely wanted to use are. You might want to change that.

“Well, you would be the type to send creepy text messages- besides, you’re about the only guy I’ve given my number too so I’d be concerned if it had been some guy named Bob instead.”

Here the proper use of to would be with one O.

“Of course I am!” she told him and was shooed off to go get into another pair of clothes that were much nicer and better suited for dinenr.

I'm guessing you meant dinner? Haha, we all make mistakes, right?

She grabbed hold of my gladiator shoes and ran down the steps to see that only Jonathan, Brianna and Brady remained.

Okay, so you're doing this story from third person's point of view and here you just accidentally put my instead of her.

Other than those I love your writing and I'd love an update! (Sorry if you think I'm super strict and controlling about your grammar and spelling!)

I love stories that involve a) hockey boys b) Blackhawk boys c) and roller coasters. I love stories that also include the boys from the hawks and no one knows who they are! They always excite me because I know who they are and what they look like and I wouldn't be able to refrain myself from letting it be known who they were. I would probably be quiet about it; I would just make it known to them. So, I like the story line. I hope you post more because it interests me!! So please do, its really good.