I liked this a lot.You managed to effectively pack a lot of information into a relatively short story and hold up a mundane but still somehow ominous tone, which added to the scariness. I also liked how you flipped the typical gender paradigm by making Sarah the angry, vengeance-seeking one and painting her as the bad guy rather than the murderer. I spotted a few grammatical/spelling errors and some of your descriptions seemed a little unnecessary and boring, like chemical romantics. said, the first paragraph was a bit tedious, but overall it was really good and dark.
October 26th, 2011 at 01:17am