wow, you fucking bitch, you killed Danny. anyway, you were right, i did cry. i loved this though, not gonna lie. in the beginning it was good, towards the middle you had some spelling errors and you switched scenes really fast, not the funeral part, the part where he was getting Jenna and stuff. the part where you switched scenes later on was perfect, you picked a good idea for that. you deff got brownie points for twincest and Danny. EVEN THOUGH YOU FUCKING KILLED HIM. anyway, i loved how you included James as the main character, because i love all of them, and you included Sam. you did some research on Asking Alexandria which was a great idea and i couldn't help but laugh at the preacher dude because i pictured his voice being monotone. xD the only mistakes were spelling, which was honestly only you mixing me with my, but, i can totally understand how you did that. i also noticed that you didn't ramble whatsoever, it was like perfect. so basically the only mistake was switching the scenes kinda quickly, well, you know what i mean, i think. but overall amazing job, and good luck in the contest. :D
August 11th, 2011 at 11:32pm