Everybody Has a Secret - Comments

Ooof... well, this is rough. :(
Poor Mira. Dammit, I was hoping that wouldn't happen. But, I guess to look at the positive... she might've had to deal with a lot of medical issues due to what happened, so... I mean, I guess that's a good thing that she was put out of that misery. :(
And sigh... I don't see things looking up for Eliana. Although she did get really sick by the end, maybe that'll be the newsflash for her.
Alex is such a good husband. <3 He's so cute in this, I can't. :)) And it made me sad when Eliana said about a "real family," and then when he seemed sad when she said that. I don't blame him; he does feel like it is that with her and Eric. That was kind of rude for her to say. I understand that circumstance isn't exactly ideal, but just because she's not related to him by blood, doesn't mean he's not her actual family. That's like insulting almost to anyone who adopts or fosters. Hmm... I think I justified her anger before, and it definitely was something she had to get used to... but it seems like she should be accepting by this point.
I hope he realizes that he shouldn't just keep letting her drinking binges go. He has to know something's wrong, right? Hm.
Anyway, great job with the update! Interested in seeing more. :) Sorry to hear you're met with a writer's block though... with the symptoms she's having, it almost seems like she's pregnant again? But I'd almost hate for that to be the case, especially if she's been drinking so much. I don't see good things coming from that. :(
But you could definitely maybe work more with the depression idea, like, Alex helping her get some help or something. Because she definitely needs it in some shape or form.

Oh, okay. Thanks for clarifying. :) And don't apologize, girl, it's all about learning and becoming a better writer. You're getting better as you learn more, but again, just wanted to point that out, if your last sentence referred to the last paragraph of my last feedback?
Anyway, aww, this new chapter. :((( NOOOOO...
Poor Mira. Why. I got excited too quickly, dammit. :( And now she's struggling and oh gosh... what's going to happen now? :((
Looking at the positives... I love how strong Alex and Eliana's relationship still is. <3 Like, they're dealing with so much right now, and are still finding ways to make each other happy when they can. That's really admirable, since a lot of couples wouldn't be able to do that. I just really love them.
And I love how this latest chapter ended similarly to their last, with them saying goodnight to one another. While normally this would seem repetitive, it actually wasn't; what I saw in it was the change in dynamic between this chapter and the last. Like, the last one ended on a better note, and then this one didn't... it just goes to show how things can change so quickly, and yet, their relationship is still as steady as it was before. Idk if that was intentional thought put into it or not, but that's how I looked at it, and I loved how you did that.
So great job with the latest chapter, even though it was sad with Mira. :( I hope she's able to pull through. She still seems like a trooper, so fingers crossed.
Excited to see more! :)

@ Nanook
She'd be in the 2nd trimester, so about her 5th month of pregnancy.
Yeah, I messed it up a lot though. I'm sorry.

Aw, yay, she's okay! :D Thank God.
I'm a bit confused, though... like I guess I'm wondering how many months pregnant Eliana was? Because it seemed like when she found out about the sex of the baby, she was less than five months (I think that was mentioned), and believe me, I again am beyond happy the baby is okay... but like, if it was less than five months... how on earth is the baby okay? ://
I just... I feel like that happens, rarely. Usually, a baby will struggle at 7 months, let alone, less than 5. But maybe I'm just not remembering correctly, or maybe you ended up thinking differently and just forgot to change it where you put she was less farther along?
Just trying to keep the realistic factor in check. But again, I am really glad that she's okay. :) And Mira is a beautiful name. :)
Sorry it took me a minute to comment, girl. I'm the ultimate hypocrite... asking you to update ASAP but then take more than a day to comment. Sorry about that; have just been a bit busy. :/
Anyway, this all being said, I really enjoyed this update; it was very lovely, and you definitely do have the realness factor with factoring in postpartum depression. Or well, she's possibly dealing with it, anyway, but that's definitely a common thing that I feel like isn't discussed a lot, so kudos for including that.
Interested in seeing what's next in store! :)
Also, the "couple" vs "few" thing... I honestly wouldn't have second-guessed that. In all honesty, they can sometimes be interchangeable... even though "couple" is, technically speaking, two. But I feel like in common speaking, "a couple" can replace "a few" at times. So, again, that's great that you went back and changed it on technical terms, but not too big of a deal. Just wanted to let you know that in case for some reason, it happens again; I wouldn't really worry about it unless someone else messaged you saying about it?

Hey, guys, making an edit. Meant to say a few weeks NOT a couple.
Thanks!
Andrea

OMG. :O
GIRL. PLEASE DON'T DISAPPEAR FOR MONTHS AGAIN. XD :( I need to know what happens next! :O
Oh no. :((( I don't feel like it's going to be good. Sigh. Why do bad things happen to good people? :(
I'll keep my fingers crossed, though, that some kind of miracle may happen. Pleaseeeee... :(
This is so disheartening, especially after only recently finding out that it's a girl. :( Aww. Man. :(
This comment is just full of frowny faces but I'm just having a hard time reacting any differently. :( Sigh.
But I was pleasantly surprised to get an update notification for this. :D So love that you updated even though it was a bit sad. And great job in general with the new chapter; I'm a bit tired/lazy at the moment, so I won't point out the errors, lol. Plus, you noted there probably would be some, so I won't be annoying, lol.
Really interested in seeing what happens next! Ugh, I hate cliffhangers. XD But it keeps us reading I guess lol.

Aw, yay, you're back! :D
Great job with the chapter! Still so sweet, Alex and Eliana's relationship. :') Glad that everything is progressing well now, after all that drama they went through.
One thing I want to note, when you do the consecutive dialogue, maybe sometimes more often label who's talking? Like these two lines threw me off a bit:

“I love you too.”

“When’s the appointment for the sex reveal?”

Like, they had been going back and forth, but then these two sounded like they were said by Alex? But then they weren't labeled, so it just threw me off a bit. I did figure it out but it just made me go back, so just wanted to note that as something to keep an eye on if you do that. Or, you could have maybe put the two questions into one quote instead of two to keep it consecutive. Or, after the second line:

“When’s the appointment for the sex reveal?” I continued.

Since it was Alex's POV, for instance. Maybe this was just an error, though, and now I'm just annoyingly over-pointing it out. XD
But other than that, you did a really awesome job with the chapter! I'm glad you're back, and I'm still here reading, for sure. Excited to see more. :)

Glad you are back! Can't wait to read more!

Cute, cute, yaasss. Loved the new chapter. :) Even if it was a bit sad with him leaving, but it was still sweet at the end there. :)
In response to your last comment, no problem, just noting something I noticed. Up to you where you take it, I'll still be here to read. :)

@ Nanook
Yeah, I've noticed that I've been using a lot of dialogue but there will be more paragraphs especially since Eliana is going to be alone for a while.
But as always, thank you for your feedback!

Yay, an update! Great job with the chapter! :D
Hmm... one request to make: I feel like you've been doing a lot of dialogue as of late. Dialogue is good, don't get me wrong, but I would like to see you go back to how you incorporated description as well, if you can. You did that a lot in the prequel, so it's kind of throwing me for a loop in this installment.
But I still love this, don't get me wrong. And you're still doing a bit of those transitions during dialogue, but just something I noticed that has changed a bit. Just saying that staying consistent would be good. :)
And one thing I spotted:
Your mom just wanted one kids so I guess it was either one or none.”
I think you just meant to put "kid" here and you added the "s" lol, no biggie.
As for the update overall, I love that she wants to have the baby, yay! And it was so sweet with the sonogram scene and all. :) They are genuinely happy.
But awww, he has to go on tour and miss it. :/ That'll be a bit disheartening; I mean, he missed out on Eric's life and even though this is just the pregnancy... he'll be missing some of the important times with that too. :/ That's probably the bittersweet part of all of it.
But anyway, loved the chapter overall and can't wait for more! :D

@ BeautyIsOnlySkinDeep
Oh gotcha. No worries. :)

@ Nanook
lol yes I meant thought but idk why I couldn't think of the word.
I'm not all that great in English tbh. I'll change it now!
thank you~

Yay, an update! lol. I was on here when I got the notification which is why I'm commenting pretty quickly. XD
Great job with the chapter! Awww... they're gonna have a baby! How cute! :D
One question I had... or a part that confused me...

“Yeah. I have morning sickness and it’s not even the morning.” I laughed.
“I think most have that same question.”

?? What was the question? Or maybe you wanted to say 'thought' here instead? lol. I was so confused. XD
But it's sweet that he just wants what she wants. :) No pressure.
Can't wait for more! :)

Well, I'm glad you did post it over there, and said about your mibba, because otherwise, I don't think I would've found it on here.
But great, glad that was fixed, haha. And no problem. I'm really excited to see this continue. :)

@ hopeless1313
thank you very much!

@ Nanook
Hey, thank you for the feedback! I appreciate it. And yeah, I kind of posted it over there just to see but I'm so used to this one that I'll continue it here.
I did put the two stories together. They were but I'm guessing mibba messed with it lol. But thank you again!

Just started reading and read the prequel and this one in two days! Can't wait to read more!

Hi there,
Okay, so, I saw you started the prequel to this story on ATL fan fic. On there, I saw you had said about how you posted on Mibba, so I came over here to see if you had more of it posted and it turns out you completed it and are now on this installment. :D
So, that's how I found this, just as a background. Now, onto the actual story and sequel.
I seriously love this. I'm not sure how I didn't find your other story before; I honestly felt like I've read all of the Alex fan fics there are to read on this site (or well, not true, but just the ones that really get to me anyway), but then I found this and it turned out I was wrong. This is seriously so good. I love Alex and Eliana's relationship. First, unique name for her character, so kudos there. But yeah, they are seriously so cute together, and even though Eliana was a bit frustrating with just finally admitting her love for him in the prequel, she finally did and that made me happy. :)
As for this installment, you definitely pulled the mother of all twists. Just by reading the bio, I kind of had some guesses going as to what exactly would change for them, but what actually happened I was not expecting at all. :O But it's awesome how Eliana has grown to accept Eric though. I mean, she doesn't really have much choice if she wants to be with Alex, but still. And just, it's so sweet how close he's already gotten with Alex and Eliana. :')
So yeah, I'll definitely be here reading the story. I also admire you for continuing it; I noticed when you started both of these stories and it really shocks me that you came back on to continue them. I've never seen that before without some sort of motivation (there have been a few other authors I've seen come back, but not without receiving feedback). But you just came back on your own because you just want to write for yourself and see this done and I really respect that. That's seriously awesome.
This series is seriously awesomely written and I'm bummed that I didn't find it sooner. But I will definitely be here to read it now if you continue. :) Which I really hope you do because I just find it awesome how you came back to it, and I would love to see you finally finish it up. :)
So yeah, I think I'll refrain from reading the version on ATL fan fic (unless you're changing it, if so, let me know). I see you updated this recently though, so I'm thinking you'll probably continue this as is and you're just posting it on there now as well. But yeah, I'll definitely be reading it on here.
I binged reading it in a day. I seriously just love it that much. Awesome job you've done with this, seriously. I can't wait to see how you continue it and what all is in store! :)
Also, just something to note: I notice this sequel isn't connected with the prequel. There is a way to do that under your story settings. I just want you to know that because some of your old readers may not even know this is here simply because it's not connected to that one (which will usually be a link in the top right corner of the first installment, top left corner for this installment). But yeah, just something to note in case you wanted to do that. I notice you note that it's the sequel on the summary page though, so there's at least that clarification. :)
It surprises me greatly that this doesn't have any comments yet, because you seriously deserve it, for coming back and just for your writing in general. But yay for me being the first one! :D