Candy Apple Endings - Comments

  • PinkMartini

    PinkMartini (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    Ahem. So... I love you're writing. So fracking much. So... I decided to read this story. And the first thing I did when I clicked on it was stare at the layout because it's... beautiful, dude! I think it's sooooo gorgeous. I love it! :D And then the story as well had a very amiable and relatable voice which is fantastic. And towards the end, when I was kinda getting the feeling that her best friend was going off to war, I was thinking the whole time, 'Don't die... don't die... Oh, who am I kidding, he dies, doesn't he?' And at the end, I was like 'NOOOOOO!!!' Unless of course I misunderstood the bit about the pine box, but I believe you were refering to a coffin. Anyways, the language was very light throughout the whole thing, even at the end. I think that you not putting a stress on him coming back from war in a pine box made it all that more devastating. It was really great. Awesome job! :)
    August 23rd, 2011 at 12:42am
  • stopkellinme

    stopkellinme (120)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    The layout was okay. I liked the banner, but the story area pattern along with the wood pattern didn't go together. I would also make the story area white---with the white dividers it doesn't look good. The actual story was cute and I enjoyed it. I like how the MC stayed by his side the whole time; it's a nice friendship story. I also loved the title. Overall, great job. (:
    August 18th, 2011 at 09:21pm