Mirror, Mirror - Comments

I am here to judge this entry for the Phobias Writing Contest.

First off, Great choice by picking Fear of Mirrors. For some, it might seem like a silly fear and at times even unrecognizable, but it's as dangerous and real as the most common ones.

The layout is absolutely beautiful and eerie. It goes perfectly well with the story. The egotistical ideas of a crazy girl and the monsters that is created through her insanity were described greatly. You managed to use a form of symbolism in your story, which is evident in mirrors. For me, in a deep meaning, tells me that she was not only literary afraid of the "monsters" in the mirror, but somehow she was scared of the woman she was becoming. It depends on the reader. In my case, I was ale to analyze within the specific and clear plot.

I agree with my fellow commentators that it had some creepy scenarios where a reader could easily feel what Crystal was feeling. You managed to describe her fear in a sense that us as readers can experience.

I like the interaction at the beginning, where Crystal meets her uncle, who happens to suffer the same fate as her, but in her mind, she believes, monsters are real. Your story was written in a very realistic way. Having people doubt or not believe what sick people go through is very real, and a lot of times, these people go through their sickness alone. You managed to portray that in the interaction between her and Matty. I was glad, he managed to realize that she really needed help. The end part was perfect and very true. Fear will always remain, there's no cure for it. It might disappear for a while, but it will always lived within oneself.

There were quite a few missed punctuation marks, that I am sure could be added with another glance at the story, but it didn't distract me from reading, or understanding this story.

Overall, great piece.
Good Luck!
Christie-
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So, oh my god. Definitely not what I had expected. I absolutely love what you did with everything, and I love how the layout goes perfectly with the story. A+!

I do like the idea for this. I definitely agree with everyone else, quite a few parts of this are creepy and had me looking over my shoulder. Thank goodnes I don't have a mirror in my room! This truly is a unique plot though, I honestly haven't read anything like it before. The end statement is lovely s well because it is so true. Sometimes, a fear is just there and you can't get rid of it. It's silly to do so. I'd really like to see this fleshed out into a full story though, as some parts do seem slightly rushed. Is there a reason behind her gaining the fear after she speaks to her uncle, is it a curse? I'd definitely like to find out more about it. I think this could do really well as a fully chaptered story. Nonetheless, it's still awesome as a two-parter!

I'll be announcing the winners later on tonight, so good luck!

I really like the idea of this. It was a it rushed though. But well done.

This was really well written and creepy. I loved it!

This was really interesting. It was very enjoyable, even though parts were really creepy! Thanks so much for submitting it to my contest. Keep your eyes on the contest thread, I'm judging entries now! <3 ^-^

This was incredible, I loved it, well written, very interesting, good job!

I like the layout, it's easy on the eyes and the color really suits the theme I feel.

Choking me. Protecting me.

I love the fact that even she isn't sure about them.

I love the fact that her sister is a bitch instead of being supportive; i feel like it's a much more realistic reaction from a sibling.

but nothing really made since.
Do you mean "sense"?

It was nearly pith black in here
Pitch

I like the endig; it wraps it up nicely.

Great story.
The hands just freaked me out.
Update soon?