September 6th, 2011 at 02:17am
Chapter Five Comment starting now! C:
Whoa!That picture behind the words "What are we supposed to do now?" really popped up at me. Sorry. My computer has trouble loading pics because of my internet.
Yep, I'd be pissed too. I like the Hate Dr. Phil moment. I mean that dude does need to stop trying to help people while acting like a know it all. I am totally hating Haven and yet... I like her. I don't know why, I just do.
I really like Claire though! She's so supportive! :D I wish I had a friend like that. In real life I mean.
This dream sequence is very vivid and detailed! I'm imagining this easily too! I don't know why, but that is one scary part!
Mangled bodies spewed across the once was pleasant landscape. Limbs mutated. Throats slashed and bodies lost of dignity. They are blood. They are nothing. They aren't human anymore. Blood pools near my feet.
^ That one I mean. xD
This is one intense chapter, Cheyenne! >_< It's good though! And you never lost that poetic touch in this story either! I loved it! Sorry about not reading it sooner. :)
Interesting chapter here. First I have to say the everything paragraph in green before you started the chapter is a nice touch.
It's good there's a couple of out there commas and the noticed at the beginning you used 'your' when I think it's suppose to be 'you're'.
Other then that amazing as always.