I Don't Believe In Luck - Comments

*forbidden love

I see now how different this story is, with the vampire law and forbidden law. I swear it is like I'm in drugs some days and I just DONT THINK! So don't take me seriously if I ever say something bad about you or your story, which I won't do anymore. Hehe, he sawed his arm off! XD can't wait for the next chapter. And about what your nan said, that is why I hide all things precious to me from my parents/grandparents. They would hate my music, writing, the things I read. They would try to take it all away.

okay first of all. "wailed and screamed like a cheerleader on her period". Where the fuck did you pull that similie from?! XD. I laughed for a while over that xD. Secondly. Not everyone is going to like your writing style; no way around that one sweet. If your nan doesn't like it then it's a shame, but you've gotta remember, there are a lot of us out here who DO like your writing style. Thirdly. Don't put the snippet in an A/N, make it it's own story and put snippets in there. Finally. I like this story, even if it is a little like some of the ones I've read, but the thing is, no two stories are the same, because they are written by different people with different ideas. :) <3

“Name shitbag!”
“Bert…”
“You call me sir. Now you do realise that torturing fertiles isn’t a fashion statement. It’s a deathwish.”

THAT is my favourite part of that entire chapter. I may have done a little danced in my head xD. Where abouts in the UK are you from?

oh no! He stabbed Frankie! With the bad wood stake things o.o PLEASE DONT KILL HIM D8

ooooh. The bracelet glamour I take it? Come on Geeeeee rip it off his wrist!

Oh wow poor Frankie D: his guardian is a right bastard! (Was gunna use a much stronger word there but I couldnt remember what rating your story is) I wish I could save Frank from all that D:

just started reading this so you'll get a lot of comments as I read each chapter lol. I really loved the start to this. I genuinely awwwwed when Mikey said 'kishen'. Too. Cute. :3

And oh yeah, you are really lucky to have those tickets! I thunk they are a great band and it is inspiring to see a chick rock band out there! I hope you have a ton of fun!!! :)

Wow. Go Gee for saving them!!! I am so glad someone will kill Bert for me, or else I would have jumped into your story and personally cut off all his limbs and put him in a vat of wine like the Chinese used to do. Well, now I don't have to!!! I feel so bad for Frankie, living in those conditions with such a vile creature as his guardian, never knowing what he truly was. Anyways, you are a great writter and this story is fairly easy to read. The plot is common though, and I hope you are going to send us a curveball somewhere in here. One other thing is that the grammar is a bit off. If you could just read it over a couple times before you submit it, I'm sure you would see that. It isn't a big issue, just something I noticed. My teachers have drilled grammar into my head, seeing as I am an advanced student, and the littlest things bug me. Other than these things, your story us wonderful. It has great potential, and though the plot is common, it also has a TON of originality. I have to say your writing style is very unique and I love it. :) Never give up on writing because it really seems like it is for you and you're passionate about it. :) Love it! Update soon?

Gosh, poor Frankie, I'm so surprised that he had enough pain tolerance not to scream his little eight year old lungs out. God, this man is just so horrid, I want to kill him.

I have now taken your comment virginity! Awww, Gee and Mikey's relationship is just so adorable! And the way Mikey talks is just priceless! :3 Please update soon because I really like your story! :)