February 16th, 2012 at 09:04pm
Holy Crap!
Okay, wow...Um, the summary gave me the chills and I'm so on this. It's so freaking interesting. I mean, you - I have no words. Anyway, I will now show you that yes, I did read it. I know people sometimes just put what I put above and then don't specify which leads you to believe they didn't even read it. But I, my dear, did.
Chapter one/Prologue: It was short, but to the point.
The darkness led to a scalding fire, which would inflict everlasting suffering.
Very dramatic, in one sentence it was detailed and explained. Very good. It brings chills up my spine, it's very intriguing. It's insane that these are things you dream about. It's kind of scary but very cool.
Chapter two: Just the title of it scared me. The way you give detail of every single thing is just amazing. I pictured myself as the character and I imagined waking up in goo. The abandoned farm seems so scary but it certainly goes with the story line.
And EW! The maggots part scared the crap out of me. I'm still shivering from that. Wow, you truly are an amazing writer. For some reason you remind me of Edgar Allan Poe.
The fact that she's actually in a hospital and her mom can't hear her is frightening. I mean, I can feel how badly she wants to wake up and end this all. The crazy woman with the intestines scared the life out of me.
Wow, you're good. Keep it up.
I love your layout.
Now with your story
This was an interesting, yet dark tale of someone having a brain tumor.
Chills ran down my back, like I was watching a suspenseful movie.
I love how you wrote this, you are very well written descriptions.
I cant wait to see more
Keep up the good work
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