The Lies We Told Got Me Here - Comments

I absolutely love this story so far, please continue

Update already! I want to read more its really good

I absolutely LOVE this. It actually freaked me the fuck out, especially at the beginning where you said the footsteps were getting faster as she was moving faster. It was realistic and just flat out amazing. :D

Just the whole idea of lies catching up with you in the end is great, too, and to put a story like this with that idea in the background was brilliant :)

This is a really cool idea. When you talked about this being sort of like Prom Night (in your journal), did you mean the one with Jamie-Lee Curtis? I prefer that one(: Okay, the layout is very simple. I would kind of prefer if you had a banner picture, but that's just me. The story is such a cool idea, seriously. I did not see any grammar or speling mistakes, so good job(:

Wow, this is really good.

I really like the title, it caught my eye. I like titles that are different and draws people in. The summary was short but still drew me in to read.

This was really good, your details were beyond good. I could almost picture it in my head. It showed that all lies to catch up with you, your never free from your lies. You showed not everyone has a picture prefect life. It kept me reading, some stories I read I get bored, or sometimes doesn't make sence. But you kept me reading, leaving at the edge of my seat and I love that.

Overall this is very good and I will be reading more :)

Woah, I absolutely loved how the guy turned out to be the one they done all that too. Real good motive! I was hooked until the end because I really wanted to know what he was going to do with her and everything. The layout went brilliant, I think, with this!

Whoa... holy shit that was incredible. I haven't read something that good in... a really long time. I love the story line you've got so far It had chills up and down my spine. I really like the title too it definitely drew me in and the layout is simple and not too distracting like some (even my own) layouts. If this is just the first chapter I'm dying to see what you have in mind for the rest of the story because my mind is blown. I'm glad I swapped for this. Consider me a subscriber!

Oh my good lord, this was wild. You've got this. . . incredible plot line that's just flawless and horrifying all at the same time. I've never been able to find a really, really good horror story on here, so perhaps I have finally found one. You've just set this beautifully wicked story up and I seriously am on the edge of my seat. It clicked with me what had happened while I was reading the flashback before I ever finished it and I literally gasped aloud and started reading faster trying to have my hunches confirmed. This was just so wild, this guy is so sick and twisted; yet so is she. I get a Saw vibe from this rather than a Prom Night one, especially when he said "You're not thankful for what life gave you, therefore I shall take it away from you," and I was just really shocked while reading her confession. She's a. . horrible person. I wouldn't say she deserves it because no body deserves that, but. . :/ Yeah. Ahah. This is brilliant. I cannot wait for you to update. <3

This has a really good plot line, the title actually really drew me in so thats always good. The layout isn't too flamboyant and I love it. I really enjoyed the chapter, I was a little ansy to see what was going to happen next to be honest. XD I am curious as to who call the EMT's though - its something that keeps naggings

ok processing: holy shit! that was awesome!

I have to admit I wasn't expecting those other crimes at the end, I thought she had just done that one thing and the guy had come back for revenge, my bad, getting even. This was really good I like how it was written. The flashback was a good touch and her waking up in her undergarments gave the feeling that he did something to her (even though it may have just been like that to make you think he did)

The electric shock was also a good touch, he must have put a cord or something on her body and she just didn't notice. Which is plausible when your in a cabin in the middle of God-knows-where.

I'm wondering who called the EMT's though. If it was the guy then I guess he wanted them to see her slain (because the end signifies that she will be dead when they get to her).

I really like this little piece, it was well put together with a lot of twists and I really enjoyed reading it.

Holy shit this is good. I like the plot and I got chills reading it. :D

xxxx <3

That was really great. It really wasn't a prom night feel. It made me think more of Jason V. I can't spell the last name, but I'm sure you know who I mean. But I really liked it.

To start off, I like the layout because it's plain and simple. There are so many overly-decorated (like mine sometimes...) that can be so distracting, but really it's what written that matters. So thank you, for not torturing my eyes with vivid images and neon fonts xD Though the summary was only one line, I can only imagine what sort of lies were told and how this will be turned into a full-blown story. You have peaked my interest :D

Onto the chapter:

“P-p-p-p-p-l-e-a-s-e..,” she choked out just above a wisper. "whisper"

That was the only spelling/grammar mistake that I found, and I commend you for that. This was very well written, and while I do not support revenge or hurting others even if they do support it, I do think he was justified to do what he was doing to the woman and her friends.

I am wondering why the woman started on a path of crime? Like, what was her childhood? I know you said she was picked on and bullied, but to what extent? And did her friends do the same thing? Also, you wrote somewhere about how she did have the decency to save the boy, so I would guess she does have an ounce of simpathy. If so, why did she kill the lady?

Or maybe I'm thinking too in depth xD This is just a oneshot I'm guessing. Really, I did like it a lot and seeing as I'm not much of a horror story reader, that says a lot. The idea as a whole was very nicely done, I just wish it were longer so I could read more of it! XD

Good luck with future writing <3

I'll admit, this was an interesting idea, as, I am not a fan of horror movies like this or horror stories so I haven't seen -a lot- of stories or movies like this, so it was a new sort of experience for me. However, I have a few complaints about it, my biggest one being: it seemed rushed.

You had a great idea going for you. Revenge is a great motive for a character and can have so many avenues of plot. Especially with the guy's background, what happened, why she did her crimes and other characters that were involved? I could actually see this being turned into a chapter story. With an elaborated plot and more detail to it, more background.

As, I am curious, as to why she continued with her crime life. She could have been mentally disturbed as a child, or she could just be getting at thrill out of it, and if that was the case, and you elaborated, it would have been more satisfying to see her get what she deserved if we had time to grow on the character.

Another complaint I had is that you told us, a lot. That they weren't supposed to have drugs or alcohol or that they had no reason to abuse the child. We could infer that from them hiding in the woods and how they did things, actually, so that wasn't needed, telling us. But it's alright, I guess, it just interrupted the flow of the story, to me.

In all, this was a great idea. I love the idea of revenge and it as a motive. It's one of my favorites, so it was a decent story because of that, and I already told you my complaints. I really believe this should be elaborated on and expanded upon. Or maybe I am judging this wrongly, as I am not into horror? I don't know.

But in any case, decent story, it was a nice read, just too quick for my tastes. Good job, and good luck with other writings, and happy writings.

Whoa. Oh my God. This was amazing. I'm not much of a horror story fan, but this one was amazing. The writing was awesome, I saw no errors, and the imagery was so vivid. I could NOT stop reading this one. At first, Anna sounds like just a regualr woman who is being pursued by a creep, but as the story progresses, you notice that she is seriously a terrible person. This was well thought out and the backstory was so descriptive and perfect. Thank you for writing this, she got what she deserved at the end.

The layout was also amazing, too. It was simple and easy to read, but it was still elegant and pretty. It wasn't distracting and the color scheme fit together nicely.

So glad I swapped for this!

:O This story was absolutely horrifying, but so,so cool! I loved how in the beginning you made the woman seem so innocent and not bad. But then as the story comes closer to an end, you see how horrible the girl really was. Honestly, she deserved whatever happened to her. Really? Hurt someone you don't know because you want revenge? Stupid bitches.

This was such a horrific story, I couldn't stop reading ^.^ Maybe you can do more of these types of stories? ^.^

This was an amazing horror story. I didn't get a Prom Night feel, more of a Freddy Kruger kind of feel. I love the detail and the entire story. I love revenge, even if it sounds bad, I absolutely love revenge and you've made this a story worth reading. It truly was amazing.