Down in Flames - Comments

  • Brian Haner Jr

    Brian Haner Jr (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    Australia
    O_O
    Jesus Christ.
    I really don't know what to say other then this was so beautifully written it was heart breaking to read.
    I love this story, its so full of ...gah i dont even know but its just amazing.

    LOVELOVELOVELOVE!
    September 16th, 2011 at 04:30am
  • CharmedLuna

    CharmedLuna (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    29
    Location:
    United States
    Okay that was a total shocker!
    but this was my favorite line of this story so far

    Her eyes closed as she readied the gun in her mouth, her teeth making a slight scraping sound on the gunmetal. She hated the feel of the barrel in her mouth, but she wouldn’t have to feel it for long. It would be over and done with in a few moments. She took a deep breath around the gun, hoping it would be her last as she prepared to end everything

    Was that the end though? How could it be?
    Aw man, sad endings suck XD
    September 16th, 2011 at 02:25am
  • RosiePosie08

    RosiePosie08 (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    United States
    Oh no!
    September 16th, 2011 at 02:24am
  • amdinunzio

    amdinunzio (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    you better not wait two fucking months to update after THAT or i am going to be fucking pissed as hell.
    September 16th, 2011 at 01:54am
  • Synful Shadows

    Synful Shadows (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    Holy crap! She shot herself. I seriously hate Matt for what he said. He's the biggest bastard on earth for saying that shit. Grrr I hate him! But what happens next dude? What was he saying? I absolutely need to know what happens next. Update soon please!
    September 16th, 2011 at 01:16am
  • hachie

    hachie (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    United States
    HOYL SHIT! 0.0
    I really didn't she would shoot herself with Matt's gun!!!!!!
    I am shocked to the core that Alyssa decided to end her life after Matt said those fucking cruel words to her.
    Damn when he said those words, I literally felt my heart break because Matt told Alyssa that he doesn't want to love Alyssa and that he would rather get comfort from other woman than deal with Alyssa.
    I so want to kill Matt for destroying Alyssa and leaving nothing but a shell.
    I hope Alyssa somehow lives because she deserves to live the life she wants not what Matt wants.
    He deserves to rot in jail for tearing Alyssa's soul apart.
    PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    September 16th, 2011 at 12:58am
  • Baby.Blue.Eyes

    Baby.Blue.Eyes (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    99
    Location:
    United States
    Ohmygodohmygodohmygodohmygodohmygodohmygod!!! She can't be dead!!!! Holy crap!!! Okay u HAVE TO UPDATE TONIGHT OR ILL DIE! Not really, but puhlease update tonight!!!!
    September 16th, 2011 at 12:40am
  • Synnatural

    Synnatural (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    33
    Location:
    Canada
    GAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!
    MOOOREEE. damn, im like dieing lol <3
    So good and so hearbreaking at the same time.
    Keep up the great work!
    September 16th, 2011 at 12:15am
  • Desori

    Desori (115)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    Great Britain (UK)
    You've written this so well that I forget that Alyssa isn't real. I actually have no idea what to say to that chapter, it's not something that you see often in stories, not many authors go through with it, I like that you have, even though the story of Alyssa isn't a happy one, I like that it's shocking.
    September 15th, 2011 at 11:54pm
  • x-LozziePop-x

    x-LozziePop-x (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    26
    Location:
    United States
    Oh I hope Alyssa is ok! That chapter was really heartbreaking...I could feel how depressed she really is about her life with Matt...so sad :( x
    September 15th, 2011 at 11:46pm
  • CharmedLuna

    CharmedLuna (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    29
    Location:
    United States
    No! Alyssa! That's not the way! Grrr. it's hard to think
    that people who are being hurt want to hurt more. cutting
    themselves makes them feel like they have control again
    and that's just dumb. Hopefully she gets help, she needs it.
    September 15th, 2011 at 01:18am
  • hachie

    hachie (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    United States
    So Brian left knowing that he can't change Alyssa's mind in leaving Matt.
    But damn Matt is one sadistic fuck!
    I mean he wants Alyssa to fight back when he abuses her but he also wants her to be submissive to him at the same time.
    Does he even really love at all or he is just keeping her around for a toy that he can play with?!
    And now Alyssa is cutting herself because she can control that pain and if she can't take anymore of Matt's abuse she could just end her life.
    PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    September 14th, 2011 at 07:20pm
  • Synful Shadows

    Synful Shadows (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    Aw poor Alyssa. I feel bad for her and she's all alone. I wish she would have taken the opportunity to run away though. Great update though :)
    September 14th, 2011 at 06:38pm
  • Brian Haner Jr

    Brian Haner Jr (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    Australia
    Aww :(
    I was thinking she'd take the freedom and literally run with it.
    Go hide out at Brian's :(
    This chapter was sad, but good. And so well written. You didn't over write it which is great, i hate when people do that haha.

    I love this story!
    Keep up the great work.
    And more Brian please ^^
    Hehe.
    September 14th, 2011 at 05:40pm
  • pjrox

    pjrox (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    Australia
    I love the updates. Sad turning point :(
    September 14th, 2011 at 04:12pm
  • RosiePosie08

    RosiePosie08 (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    United States
    Awesome updates honey
    September 14th, 2011 at 02:22pm
  • Star Angel

    Star Angel (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    31
    Location:
    United States
    love this please update soon
    September 14th, 2011 at 08:12am
  • for i have syn

    for i have syn (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    29
    Location:
    United States
    Finally catching up on all the stories I've been missing my God! I love how this one is going. I really hope Brian kicks Matt's ass. He's such a dick to Alyssa. What really tore my heart was the part about her hair smelling like the shampoo Matt doesn't like. What a fuckin prick. I seriously wanted to jump in your story and kick his ass myself. And Brian's right, she'll probably end up dead if she doesn't say something. SAY SOMETHING, ALYSSA!! SAY SOMETHING! ANYTHING! Keep this going, Kayla, this is awesome!
    September 13th, 2011 at 06:13pm
  • hachie

    hachie (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    United States
    I think Alyssa might be suffering from Stockholm syndrome.
    What Brian that if she lets Matt continue to treat her like that, he is going to kill her one day.
    Matt is just using her so he can have control over someone that won't stand up to him and he'll tell her lies just to keep her from leaving him.
    She really should listen to Brian!
    PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    September 12th, 2011 at 11:41pm
  • Brian Haner Jr

    Brian Haner Jr (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    Australia
    I really can't explain how much i adore this story.
    Brian is just wonderful and i feel so bad for Alyssa.
    I love how you've written her fear of speak out about it and haven't over done it or made it pretentious. I've read a story similar to this and the main character really gets on my nerves because she's just being completely stupid. I love that you're not making Alyssa a 'dumb victim' and i really hope that didn't come across wrong haha.
    Great job! I love it and i can't wait for more! :D
    September 12th, 2011 at 06:19am