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This was fairly a good story. The emotion that I was wanting to see wasn't exactly what I had gotten. Yes, it was made very clear that this man had lost his wife and what not, but there was just an emptiness he had felt, I wanted more, more emotion, more sorrow, more pain.

There was a run on sentence somewhere in there, but aside that, everything looks great.

This is fantastic! I like the layout but the gray background is a bit to simple I would probably do a foggy background, or an empty grave. I loved the summary to it leaves you wanting to read more and so does the first chapter. I really wanna read more. Update soon please.

The opening just broke my heart. I liked how choppy some of the sentences were and how hard hitting and heart shattering others were. It was the perfect flow if I've ever seen one, gigglys. <3 It really, really saddens me that some way some how his girlfriend died before he could ask her. That's just awful. :c </3 Breaks my heart into little pieces that never want to be put together again. I really feel for this guy. <3

Randy was waiting on her, he had been for hours but she hadn’t shown, then days went by, then months and soon a year had passed.

I think this sentence could've been split into one or two different ones. It feels kind of run on-ish. <3 I just got through the first paragraph and I would really reccomend going back and re-reading this story through it's entirety. <33 There are a few silly grammar and spelling mistakes, dolly. It's merely a suggestion and I hope it doesn't sound rude at all.<3

I like the emotions in this. You can really feel this man's anger, and hurt and ache for this woman. It's beautiful yet at the same time so painful. I'm so curious to know exactly what happened to his wife. The mention of blood had me uneeasy and thinking about serial killers, aha. /Time for me to lay off the SVU, eheh. But anyways, this was really, really good. All the emotions were tangible, and the words flowed very nicely. <3 I would love to read more of this, even if it's only a one shot, gigglys. c:

Good job. <3

Oh my goodness, this was just so emotional. I just love how determined the man was to figure out if his beloved wife was dead or not. And I just wanted to say, that the police are silly for closing the case after finding a little bit of blood… They should have searched more. Oh, well. But This was just really depressing. :/ But while I was reading this, it sort of sounded like a prologue or first chapter of a story. But that was just me. Anyway, this was wonderfully written and very emotional. Good job with this one-shot!

Oh Goodness, this was so sad :/

Layout:It's so pretty, but plain,but pretty! It doesn't distract you. It shows emptiness, like it could be filled but it can't be. I don't know, maybe it's just me but for me it represents the emptiness of the man's wife's grave.

Summary: It didn't match the story. If she was his wife,why would he ask her to marry him? That's what you might need to fix. But it gave so little out and it was so mysterious, alluring actually.

Story:It was sad, it flowed nicely, and I didn't find any mistakes. Unless you count the times you said "HE" to emphasize your point. Maybe you can put it into italics instead of capitalizing the letters.

Are you going to continue this story or not? ^.^

The layout is pretty, but I don't really think it's fit the mournful emotions.

The story itself was pretty good. I think the dialogue could be seperated, instead of bunched together in the same paragraph. Desrciptions would be nice, and maybe look at your punctuation.

Alright, on to the good feedback.

The plot was sad, very depressing. It was good, the whole idea and way it was written shows just how upset the man was and how determined to not give up. Amazing<3

Other than maybe going back and rereading it over, it was really good.