After He Unlocked the Door - Comments

this is really amazing, very real. the best fob/patd fic ive read

Honestly, at first I thought Ryan is the bad guy here, but then...

“If I wouldn’t have done it to you, you would have done it to me.” he said, bottom lip trembling as he pulled his shirt over his head. “I had to protect me and Brendon.”

“I knew if I didn’t seduce you, that you’d seduce me. You’d ruin everything.” He walked out to the living room and sat down on the couch. I sat beside him. “You’d ruin me and Bren. I couldn’t let you.”

I didn't see those coming. :3
I love Brendon and Ryan's bond. It's just, so strong... Love it, yay !

[color=000000]Goddamn♥.
I know that I'm not supposed to hate Ryan, because he was protecting he and Brendon's relationship, but he tore Pete apart. And I don't really know if Pete forgave him or not, but fuck, that was intense.
The relationship Brendon and Ryan must have to stay together through that and poor Patrick. Geebus.
This was incredible.♥

This is the first time I've read Pete/Ryan, and I loved this. I don't think I've read anything of yours before either--and let me just say that you are an amazingly talented writer.
I just, I don't even know what to say. This was amazing. Beautifully written. I loved the descriptions.

Just--Gah. I loved this

I originally read this on livejournal longer than forever ago. I remember not even looking at the author, reading it, and being speechless. It seemed familiar for some reason, but I couldn't put my finger on it. I read it, like, three times in a row before I realized it reminded me of you and your style. at first I was kinda pissed because, no, that's not fair, how can there be two utterly amazing writers while I still suck so much. Then I thought about it and realized only one person can spin something so intricate, write something with language so simple and yet have it be more complex than Shakespeare. this is you... obviously. and I actually looked at the author and was like. oh. duh.

I didn't review it on LJ because I am a blatantly lazy mexican. but I'm making up for it by commenting now. better late than never y/y.

anyway. starting now. ginasfs is one of my all-time favorite fob songs. it always got to me but after I read this it actually hurt to hear the song. I would listen to it, and think of pete and ryan and patrick and locked doors and desperation and showers and just. gah.

the entire complexity of the situation, the way ryan fears pete is amazing. the entire story you feel like pete is the one afraid (and he is), but really, it's ryan who's in submission, it's ryan who scared out of his pretty little head. he loves bden to the point that he'll destroy everyone else to keep him. that is scary, romantic and real.

and your characterization of ryan was startling. I look at that kid and I think of rainbows, puppy dog eyes, hipsters and Whole Foods. definitely not conniving, cold, and desperate like you made him.

it's an interesting contrast -- just like pete's character. that man, yes, he is a nut. he's a little fucked up, a little desperate (I could see the pattern of his spine if I stared hard enough at his shirt. amazing. so desperate that he's resorted to the ridges of a spine), definitely a deadpoet and lost so far in ryan without a map. it was unnerving to see him without that annoying confidence on his shoulders. submissive, weak pete is a little disturbing. I don't think I've read anything quite like this (attempts, sure, but whenever anyone tries to destrength pete he just turns out whiney >_> like spiderman).

His shirt rode up just enough to show me the top of his hipbone. My fingers found it by accident.
DDD; hipbones. guh. major turn on. you mention them a bit and I just had to throw it out there that hipbones are amazing and I love them. Found it by accident, you kiiiilll me. that's just. perfect. pete can't even control himself, ryan's got him so enthralled.

I love the way you set the story up, with different sections for each boy pete is with. it shows how ryan changes him. the pete in PETE AND PATRICK is definitely not the same as the pete in PETE AND RYAN. it's important to execute how much ryan deforms pete, and the separation in your story emphasizes that fantastically.

speaking of. Patrick. god, he made me hurt. the way he loves pete, even though he doesn't really deserve it 50% of the time. patrick's unconditional love fucking kills me. I just want to give him a box of truffles, a big hug and watch chick flicks with him until he feels better about having such a fuckup boyfriend :[ patrick's hurt is so real, the whole story is, but the way patrick words it...

the title. wow. it's... I love it when a writer can take a seemingly insignificant detail, like the click of a locked door, and turn it into something that makes and breaks a character.

this whole story just left me in awe. your entire take, every aspect of it. how do you do it? you come up with the most original shit. come up with things that kind of shouldn't make sense because they're not sensible things and yet make more sense than anything. bden's whole explanation for therapeutic songs. ryan's entire soapbox on how he's been with bden longer, his fucking reason for doing this to pete. pete's reason for letting him. you carry all of that out in such a way that turns reality upside down in a... realistic way. wtf I don't even know how to explain this now. you're redefining reality, basically.

you hear this all the time, but you're gifted. sorry if this review sucks and is more like rambling, but I felt the need to express my love for this.

take care.

(oh btw, bittersweet symphony = win)

I'm blown away. Again.
Pyro is one of my new favorite pairings, because of this story and the other ones you recced me.
I keep trying to write a real review for this but I truly sound like an idiot, so I'll just point out a few things that I loved.

I’d never seen anything so beautiful, that male Helen of Troy blowing cigarette smoke into the night.
Male Helen of Troy. That really stuck out to me, because I felt like Ryan's beauty was bittersweet - for Pete, and for us, the reader, as well - because ultimately we're rooting for Pete and Patrick to be together again... but we can't blame Pete for calling Ryan and going to Ryan again and again because we (or at least I) understood the primal want he felt. The need.

I think that was my favorite part, how beautiful and alluring Ryan was. And then at the end when he finally shows emotions, explains himself and things go (somewhat) how they were before... genius.

I keep trying to make this longer but for some reason today I'm making no sense at all. Just know that this was truly fucking amazing, you work the pairing beautifully, and as always - you have some of the best talent I've ever seen.

If I could write half as good as you, I'd write a book, make millions and retire at the age of 18. You are fucking incredible. I don't konw how to put into words the way this story gave me chills. Your have flow, passion, witt, everything it takes to write a story like this. Wow, that's all I can say.

XO-Bell-OX

I loved this story so much.
I can't believe it isn't as popular as something so well written should be, but whatever.
Keep up the good work.

Oh my days.

I'm not a huge panic or FOB fan, but this was really, really good. You write description's of everything so well... And I loved the way it changed from Ryan being the bad guy to him just being a bit desperate, with twisted logic. ;]

Well done, one of the best oneshots i've read by far.

hrvatkaHALLUCINATION:

Only confusion I had here: At the summary you said it was to be Ryan/Brendon. But it was Pete/Ryan. Idk if you meant to do that but if not, I'm just letting you know so you can edit.

It was intended. Ryan is dating Brendon through the whole story and it ends with the reasoning through Ryan and Brendon's relationship. It is mainly Pete/Ryan, but Ryan and Brendon's relationship is extremely important in the end.

Your review was phenomenal. Thank you<333

Wow Dru. And 'wow' being a serious understatement.

Now, I have a semi-sick obsession with boysexxx. Especially when it's violent and filled with hate. You're also one of the only people that I will actually read fanfiction from.

Kay, I'll go in chronological order.

Pete and Ryan

I must say, I felt it coming before it slapped me in the face. Everything about them was so... raw. The way they saw each other. The way they felt it about to happen. The way they persecuted the act like it was the last time they'd ever have sex with anyone. It was quite brilliant, I must say. My favorite part was part V. It perfectly protrayed the sin in innocence. Pete viewed Ryan as this almost God-like being. And God's aren't supposed to do the things that Ryan did. Yet Pete's view of him remained almost unchanging. He's this lustful God and Pete's a naïve boy. It's like Pete is going through puberty or something because he's so confused and angry and horny. I loved the general theme of hate within lust within sin. It all fits so nicely together. No criticism here.

Pete and Patrick

Okay. This section showed the internal divide within Pete. Like the lyrics say, he knows he's supposed to love Patrick. He's been with him through thick and thin, yet Ryan has this incredible hold on him. Pete wants to forget Ryan. He wants to want Patrick. Yet, jacking off saying his name and phone sex thrice a week doesn't help. It's kind of like an abusive affair. Ryan seems to hardly care and Pete is crying from psychological abuse. Getting occasionally sexual and verbal. The best part was when Patrick started yelling at him saying how he'd been there for him while Ryan was too busy getting fucked by Brendon. Lying and deceiving and whatnot. Then Pat lays in Pete's arms for an hour, crying and wishing that Pete loved him, because there's no way in Hell that he could believe that he honestly did. Next, you make the reader hate Pete and loathe Ryan even more. Idk if that was your intent but that's how I felt. I hated Pete for treating Patrick the way he did yet I hated Ryan even more because "he lead Pete on", teased him, seduced him, fucked him. Ruined him. The phone sex was the worst part (not how it was written, but made me the angriest) because it shows how nonchalant and indifferent Ryan is to the whole situation. He's content while the people around him are suffering. Again, no criticism.

Pete and Ryan

Only confusion I had here: At the summary you said it was to be Ryan/Brendon. But it was Pete/Ryan. Idk if you meant to do that but if not, I'm just letting you know so you can edit.

Anywho, this part was the best. It showed how insain Ryan has driven Pete. He fucks him one last time, gives him some crazy reasoning and cuts off all sexual ties. There's not much I can say about this part except, very well written. The sex was violent and full of hate, almost dripping with it. I loved it.

All in all, you're amazing (and NOT overrated). And I hope this review was good enough. >_<

EDIT AGAIN: The first song, Colorblind... :yah

Awesome.

jesslovespanic:

That was more than amazing.
Just, woah.
I'm subscribing, I love.
xo

Well, um, thank you, but there's really no need to subscribe. It's a oneshot...

I am very much in love with this Dru. Seriously, I love how at first we all thought Ryan was the bad guy but he really wasn't. He just want to love Brendon. Amazing very beautiful interpretation of that

That was more than amazing.
Just, woah.
I'm subscribing, I love.
xo

This was excellent. It was just WOW. I think it was one of the best stories I've read on here so far...and I get bored a lot so I've read a lot of them. I was so tired when I started reading this (it's almost 1am here) and when I finished I was almost wide awake. Amazing job!

My favorite lines:

I know I'm supposed to love you.

He meant to. I didn't.

It became my own private drinking game.

I knew I shouldn't have. I knew it, I knew it, but he lead me on!

mine, tonight.

gain control through vocabulary.

It wasn't going anywhere, of course, nailed quite securely to the floor.

hadn't seemed interested in an affair, just completely destroying my life.

still in my veins, contaminating everything.

But he didn't reach for my hand.

as if he kept all his emotions locked in a safe.

Kill me so I don't have to tell Patrick everything's okay tomorrow.

"You'll be done and off the phone by the time I come. It doesn't matter what I say."

An hour later I was in the shower, still trying to scrub him off me.

The way you unravel the story comes off real nicely, and the storyline is to die for. The way the emotion clings onto the reader is magnificent (I've read it four times. really.). I also really like the way it's divided into different parts, depending on the person with which Pete is interacting with. And the way Pete keeps looking for Ryan, and the way he blames him, is perfect.

I also liked the ending. The way you explained through Ryan that Ryan isn't really the vilan, that he just wanted to save him and Bren.

"You've known Patrick for six years." He was staring straight at me now, his eyes looked almost dead. "There were two years that you weren't together. You know how to function when you're not in a relationship. Brendon and I have been together since we met. We don't know what to do when we're not together. We've been together longer, for as long as we've known each other."
^^ I loved this part. It was just so honest and relatable. At least I can relate to that feeling.

I also really like the way you portrayed the songwriting thing. The way the songs helped heal and the way the songs held secrets or their own problems. And the way you used the language throughout (especially in the Pete/Ryan parts) was memorable.

This is perfect.

Thank you, Dru!

This is one of the most beautiful things I've read from you.
Every relation, every part it was divided into. Every word uttered by them. Every tear, every sarcastic comment. Every reason that was given. Every character developed in its own pace. Every dot and comma.
Dru, you're beautiful.

An amazing story.
It's the way you write--the flow that's got me hooked.
Ryan seemed to be enjoying it, even though it was for Brendon [and their relationship] and I liked that.
The wanting-not wanting.