March 5th, 2012 at 12:52am
Hahaha. I like Beth, Beth can stay. :p
This was really adorable and I wonder why this has no comments. That's just outrageous!
Lol, getting your comment virginity, that's a first! Now I feel special. xD
So this was totally cute! I love it!
You pulled off the submissive part really well for both of them. I mean, they both weren't completely submissive all throughout the story, but in reality, even the most submissive boy would shed that a bit if his best friend and/or lover was in danger or hurt badly. So it was really relatable to real life and made a lot fo sense.
Everything seemed to fit together really nicely, and I love when that happens in a story.
And Beth...oh Beth. I knew the second that she was mentioned that she would somehow set them up together. And even though I knew that, somehow the story still wasn't predictable, which is definitely a plus. I hate predictable stories lol.
So yeah, overall, I really liked this story and you worked it all really well.
Awesome job on it, and good luck!