Pain Pills and Pancakes - Comments

if he didn't hurry up and eat them, would end up tasting like a molded bag of smashed assholes. Honestly, your writing makes my day. xD. It was funny and just...I don't even - know. It's certainly
different.

And the ending, I honestly don't know what this is. That just made it. lol. I'm guessing he's either a drug dealer or a drug addict. He certainly seemed lost and just....going with the flow? I liked it, I like your writing too. It's short and not annoying.

The ending made sense. The guy is a drug dealer ok.

This is weird yet so wonderful. The imagery was good even if there wasn't much of it, I kind of felt it had to be like that, if you get what I'm saying.

Anyway it's different and it does exactly what it says on the tin, good job and sorry for the delay in commenting, I have been so busy.

I don't know what this is either.

You know the weird thing? I just made pancakes this morning. About an hour ago to the minute, to be exact. And they are probably still digesting in my small intestine at this very moment. Or my large one. I forget how the digestive system works. D:

Anyway. I love this. <3 I'm all into the whole "wasted youth" thing right now where all I write about is kids with drug problems and sex problems and partying problems because they're trying to escape from the world, and it's like...this was right up my alley. It's cool you didn't glamourize anything about the routine because it's not really glamorous, it's what happens when you become an addict. Nothing about your life is really glamorous, it's all just...monotonous stupid shit that you can't believe you're still doing, but you don't know how to do anything else. If that makes sense. (I say that a lot, don't I? Do I ever make sense to anyone other than myself?)

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And, of course, this line: "like a molded bag of smashed assholes." Oh, the imagery.

Had to laugh at that line and then the reviewer's response to it. Oh, Alex. :')

I absolutely loved how you did this. Honestly, I had no idea what direction you would take this in, but it was definitely a good one. I loved how the pills and pancakes were his control, and his center. The way the character controls his life by destroying himself is great. It's relatable, which made me really like this.

And, of course, this line: "like a molded bag of smashed assholes." Oh, the imagery.

Great, great job. I don't know what to say beside "I love it." :*

I have to be honest with you, I lol'd at the title, just because those two things are so different xD They layout is very pretty, and I like the picture of someone holding pancakes. The colors go very nicely together :) As for the summary, it was short, whish is nice, and it almost gave the title a bit of a different meaning in my mind. As if they suddenly became more important, or something?

Anyway, to the chapter:

I'm going to be honest, that I didn't even notice the pun at first; I had completely looked over it xD But, I found this to have a few drops of humour but also some sadness. How he only really has pills and McDonald's pancakes (xD), no family or friends or anything else. I can't imagine a life where all I have to look forward to was poppin' a pill and taking a bite of a soggy pancake. That's just so... saddeningly hilarious.

I liked the how it wasn't overly detailed, but I could definitely imagine everything. There was no mistakes at all and this really was overall done very well. Are the most random of inspirations so nice? :D

Awesome job, as usualy <3

Whoa. That was legitimately awesome. It had very funny moments, like the pun. I am a sucker for puns, my goodness. Even though it was short, it had enough development packed into those paragraphs than a whole story would. Everything had purpose and it all... made sense even if it was vague. Well, not vague, but.... never mind.

The layout was beautiful, as well. Those pancakes looked delicious and the color scheme was beautiful. It meshed nicely with the dark, but lighthearted writing in the story. Gee, I am contradicting myself quite a bit, aren't I?

Anyway, GREAT JOB!

This made me laugh. :D In a good way, not a bad way. I love the detail you used here, and like border collie said, the idea that he was handsome fazed me. But, it was a unique oneshot. :)

He loved this sweet, sugary, blissful shit pile, though. It gave him some normalcy to his otherwise stressful and less than sweet days.

I love that. <3 Good job with this. :)

When I read this, I imagined a really creepy kid, not an oddly handsome one, probably because this guy was (no offense) such a loser. I like that about him, though. Somehow, he's relatable because of how he gets enjoyment out of his day from such a weird thing. I know it comes from your McD's experiences with pain pills, Alex, but it's such a random thought! It's really rad. I really loved this, and I can't help but feel it runs deeper than just pain pills and pancakes. It kinda left me wondering what he does with the rest of his day, after his pain pills and pancakes wore off, that is. I imagine his life -- as mentioned -- must be pretty shitty for him to never, ever get tired of McDonald's pancakes. I mean, they're pretty good, but it's so odd that he never gets a hashbrown or a cinnamon bun-thing to change things up. And I was just about to mention something about him eating them every day to maintain some control over his life, but I looked through the story again and picked out this line: It gave him some normalcy to his otherwise stressful and less than sweet days. And it described what I was thinking quite lovely-ly. :) This was really amazing <3

Ok, what the fudgecakes was this, Alex?
No really. It was a bit longer than a drabble but not quite a short story.
Yet I really liked it. Mainly 'cause he mentioned food, drug dealer, and a warped fantasy / reality.
:D THE BEST CHARACTERIZATION OCCURRED RIGHT HERE.

Anyway, I found it kinda funny how you described him as being
"oddly handsome" because it's contradictory but still makes sense.

& I've always wondered why they use those ugly containers for the pancakes / breakfast foods.
Really. I don't even care for McD's breakfast foods but gosh. Ugly packaging.
Also, I find it peculiar how he had a packet of icing. Uckiness. Then the pills and and and. Aah.
This guy really is living a warped fantasy, living his life monotonously and with a routine.

I'm getting chills remembering every detail of this story. :3

This is a very cool idea for a drabble. It's just so... Interesting... I like it(:
The layout is amazing. Just so simplistic hat I love it!
I did not see any grammar or spelling mistakes, which is good (obviously). I don't really read drabbles often, but I enjoyed this one. Really great(:
That's all I can say, really.