The Seventh Mark - Comments

Your writing makes me giddy. It makes me smile like this --> C:
It's so mysterious. Your writing style doesn't necessarily 'give away' information, it shows you it, through actions and dialouge... Always leaves me wondering what next, why, how--wanting more.
Oh, how I would adore to read a book written by you! <3
It would be like how you are with The Joy Luck Club. :D

I don't sugar coat. :|

I agree with Lambs On Broadway your writing is great and then the way you describe things, you know the right words to choose. And I just love the mystery in this. Its just so weird that he doesnt know anything about this chick who just up and leaves and he has this sudden urge to find her. I wonder how the hell he's going to do that!! I mean, I wouldn't know where to start. This girl must be either f*cking amazing or f*cking pretty. There's something about her....

Your descriptions get more and more...well, wonderful. The perfect flow of your words... Your word choice is really good, they're not dull and reused, they keep a vivid image...

The description of the dust under the desk was just...marvelous. It was so clear, I saw as vividly as I would if it were right infront of me.

And the emotion behind Adam counting the marks? You captured it so well, each one having an effect on him and evoking more emotion... No words were unnecessary or need of extra.

And the seventh mark! It really struck me, how the others were "shaky, almost desperatelly written" but the seventh one was "clean and precise". I like your word choice of "lodged awkwardly by the others". Really good word choice.

Each word seemed like it had it's own place in the prologue, fitting with the others.
The first sentence of the prologue really struck me, too, I paused and sat there and looked at it. It really caught my attention.
"He didn't know what he was looking for, but he knew exactly what he was hoping for."
Really struck a cord. Not knowing what he was looking for, but knew what he was hoping for... Seemed kinda sad...because he's looking for her and what he found seemed to really bother him...

I am loving that quote. "This is where doing nothing gets you... ...it gets you no where." It's one of those things that sticks... Famous quote. :D

I agree also, with how eye catching the first line of the prologue is. A real...interest grabber. Reader grabber. I forget what exactly they called it when they were teaching us how to write essays and that, but you did it--Attention grabber, I think that's what it was. Grabs the reader's attention right away and the rest keeps me interested.

Also, like how you do your own picture edits for your stories, they always coming out great. <3
Colors work with it, too. Loving the font and size, also. :D

Looking forward to moar. Your writing can brighten anyone's day. C:
Just thinking of you writing a book makes me giddy.

Well, let me just say that this:
Adam knew the strangest woman in the world, rather, he knew of her.
line made me do a double take. My mind was already trying to figure out where this would go as my eyes were reading the rest of the summary, so a wonderful job at drawing in the reader from the first line. :D

And the reast of the summary just builds on the mystery you manage to create. I practically scrambled to click the prologue link just so I could have some small clue about Adam and this mystery woman.

Your description is simply lovely. So full of feeling, and so fluid as well. You paint a visual and sensual picture in a very poetic way. You engage all of the reader's senses in your descriptions of what is felt, seen, and smelt. Very, very spectacular.
This:
The smell of dust and yellowing pages filled his nostrils, settling in the back of his throat, his eyes squinting against the hazy air. Muted light filtered through the window, spilling against the floor in the shape of rectangles. He slowly looked over the desk, his jaw working as the silence pressed against his ears.
is a most wonderous, well written example. It is obvious that you put alot of thought and feeling into your story, just from this aspect.

I envy you the ability to describe things so well. Truly I do.

And the way you describe the deep feeling and emotion in him as he counts the marks.... You brought tears to my eyes. I felt a lump form in my throat as well.

You are one fine author, and this is a marvelous story.

I'm most definitely subscribing. :3