October 1st, 2011 at 07:32pm
I don’t really know what to say about this other than it was completely wonderful. But I really liked the repetition that was used throughout the whole piece; and it seemed that there was a different phrase that was used multiple times depending on the paragraph.
But anyway, this felt poetic to me. It’s just like the whole thing was about describing this monster. How he was kind but also felt a little bit… demonic. Well, his appearance seemed demonic to me. Anyway, what really surprised me was the very last sentence. It was just like a slap in the face or something. But it was the perfect ending it seems. Anyway, like I said before, this was just fantastic.
I’m guessing this piece is written about the person in the layout but I’m intrigued as to who this is. You’ve made them into a complex character and it’s clear you’ve got to dig down deeper than appearances to find about them properly. I think you did a good job of letting the reader inside the personality of the monster. Good job!