You're first time writing one of these .. HOLY CRAP WELL DONE> I would have thought you'd have done loads if you hadn't have said.That was very very good deary.
I think for not having written a sex scene before you did a good job. I really think you did it justice lol. At least now you know if you ever wanted to incorporate sex into any of your stories you can do it, regardless of who it's between. I think the way you made the story plot worked for it. I think it's funny she was Jimmy's assistant. The way that played out was good. Maybe with this one shot you'll get inspiration to base a full length story off of it. Just an idea. Okay, so this was probably the most lame review ever but hey what was I supposed to say "The sex was good." haha. I really don't know how much this will help you but there you go. =)