Masquerade - Comments

this was so adorable! I absolutely loved it. c:

Aww, I love it albeit it's a bit sad knowing they're going to keep it a secret but as long as they're happy. :)

Cute (:
I really like it. Secret relations always irk me a little, but it didn't really take away from the story.
Good luck! Be reading it again for the judging!

awe, this was cute (:
first off, i liked the beginning, adding in Amy. it developed Kevin more as a character, in my opinion, if that makes any sense. and i like how he wasn't sure if Thom was even gay or not. silly boy! (;
i don't like how they have to keep their relationship a secret, but i love that Kevin's willing to do so for him. it's sweet and endearing. i also like how Thom hated to idea of doing that to him; it just showed love, to me.
i absolutely love how you used your Sometimes sentence. i dunno, i just thought it fit perfectly, and when Kevin's like, I wondered about it all the time or whatever it is he exactly said, that might have been my favorite part :] <==it made me smile like that.
hm. i guess all that's left to say is, a.) i love the term of endearment baby, dunno why, i just do :} and b.) thank you for getting this in on time (:

I actually really liked this entry a lot!
You took a semi-cliched idea and turned into something I really wasn't expecting.
There was definitely a steady flow of description going on in this story, which I really liked because that's something I struggle with a lot. But really, the description was awesome and I really liked the characters throughout it.

“Maybe he isn't here…” I shouted to Amy, but she just frowned and didn’t bother replying. I kept my head lowered, kind of insecure being surrounded by so many people. But then Amy suddenly tugged on my shirt sleeve and motioned behind me. I turned eagerly and my eyes fell upon Thom’s recognisable, familiar figure. He was clearly dressed as Prince Charming – the skin tight beige trousers, the white shirt with the ruffled collar and cuffs, the gold waist coast, the navy blue overcoat with gold trimmings. He looked perfect. And then, of course, there was a gold mask covering his eyes. But I still knew it was him. I could tell from the way he held himself, his broad shoulders, his beautiful smile.

That was definitely my favorite part! It was really visual.

Yeah, great job and the ending was cute and I hope you do really well in the contest. (: