Kill the Lights - Comments

I love this story. It's so dang different. You have to update regularly. I don't see stories like this often.

First of all, I'm so sorry that it took me forever to get back to you on this swap :( Life has been slightly crazy for the past few weeks, haha. Anyways, I'm glad that I finally got the time to read this! I already like this idea. I originally thought that this story was named after a line in that 3OH!3 song I'm Not Your Boyfriend, Baby!, buttt I guess not. xD Moving on to the review!

I like the way this starts off with the main character talking to the audience, thus breaking the fourth wall like turducken said. Very interesting so far. This character is obviously very different from any other characters that I've encountered in stories on Mibba. She seems like a cool person, but I like how she's also a bit self-conscious and shy. Oh, and I like Wolfe. He's definitely cute (:

I can't read the rest right now, but I will when I have the time again. I really enjoyed this little bit; not really what I'd usually read, but great, nonetheless! Amazing job! <3

The summary and layout is really nice. I love the background for the layout. It's really outer-spacey and just really cool. Also the banner really like matches the summary since the summary is talking about this girl who wasn't like any of the other girls in the crowd, and her putting up her middle finger in the banner shows she just doesn't give a f-ck. Like really. =D I hope you go really far with this. <3

I think the layout is super psychedelic and I really like that. The colours make me happy. And the summary is cool too, AS I AM A FELLOW POKEMON MASTER. Sometimes I think the whole I'm so different~ mentality can be a little old, but I mean, she likes Pokemon so for now she is definitely on my good side.

It's an interesting perspective, breaking the fourth wall and whatnot (I think that's what it's called when you address the reader) but I like that it sort of breaks the mold and makes it a little different than other stories. I think that's really cool. I don't like how she says silly, though, addressing me like I'm four years old. That does not make me like her at all.

This could just be me, but you end sentences too quickly, if that makes sense, and disrupts the flow. I wanted to see them preform again. And they did. But I was sick that day and missed it. That could all be one sentence. If there is a "but", just put a comma and continue instead of stopping.

The first chapter was good, sets the setting and whatnot. She seems like a nice girl, I like how she's sort of shy and self-conscious, especially since she's being given all this attention she doesn't seem big-headed or anything. I think you should delve a little more into the relationship with Wolfe (I'm guessing he's like the main love interest in the story?) and how she feels about him, if they've ever talked and whatnot, what the bassist thinks.

The last chapter was interesting, though I wouldn't go to say a drug problem. If it was only once, it was like a bad experience, not like a full-fledged addiction or problem. But it's cool that you included that since a lot of bands do get into that sort of thing and being surrounded by that culture I would think it's impossible not to at least be offered.

So far, I like it. Not love it, but it's definitely interesting, I've never read a story from the photographer's perspective. I'm not really sure what the plot is yet either, aha, but like I said I like it. :)

I love this. I love how you started it. So different. I'm subscribing! Sorry it took me a while to comment. :"D

Ok, can I like, marry this? <3

I must say that your story is quite impressive the way you began your story lured me in and has me quite intrigued I can't wait for more :) keep up the good work

I love the colours.
The layout. The banner.
Gorgeous.
And I love the idea of this. The way you put the words together and made it flow is really good too! And the character who's talking is quite a girl, I think. She's different but also not different.
You're a really good writer and have quite a lot of talent.
And this is proof. :)

I loved this story!!
Very well composed,which is always a good thing =)
The layout is lovely and i loved the banners
I didn't notice any spelling or grammar mistakes =D
All in all,i look foreward to reading more from you =3

It seems like a very interesting beginning to a story. The layout is lovely, I really enjoy looking at it, and it lends a lot to the story.

The character you've made is very well-rounded and intriguing, but I don't like the informal way that she speaks in the story. It sort of turns me off and makes me not want to hear more of what she has to say, like calling the reader 'silly' as a pet name and talking about how she isn't good at starting the story. I think if she spoke in a different way, I would like it better, but that is just me and I can't say that would be the general consensus.

Beyond that, you're a very talented writer and I spotted no grammar mistakes. Keep up the good work!

I adore your layout. I like that you have different banners for the different chapters and I especially, especially adore chapter two's title. Hah. Feel me on the dancefloor alright. /creepermoment.

Anyway, I like this story as a whole. The voice you use is neutral enough where the reader can go on without forming a biased stereotype of the other characters and yet still caries enough personal preference and personality in it to have us relating to her.

This was an interesting read, and is, undoubtedly, a very, very original story idea. There are loads of stories about being a normal groupie on here, but this doesn't seem to be like that at all. It's just a girl who uses her passion, photography, to get her places. I like that.

You're a great writer with a lot of talent. I applaud you for that.

Your a very good writer, I never seen this type of stye way le I like the details and the imagery. I like the way you wrote this as her telling it to us and how in the beginning she doesnt even tell us about her it goes striaght to the bands and her taking pictures. I like the way you potray her and she seems so nice and odd. This is very realistic, keep it up comment me when updated!

Wow, you are quite the writer. :3

In the beginning of the chapter I was thinking, "This doesn't seem really appealing...I hate how it talks directly to the reader..." But then, I hit the middle and I see you really adding a bit more description and information tying the story together and forming this character that seems so realistic and intriguing. I am going to go on and read the next chapter because I think this is unique and very interesting. I especially love how you used a band that isn't used often in fanfiction.

I like the layout, its very pretty.

The summary was really good, it wasn't too long which is good. I hate reading summarys that go on forever and just ruin the story.

Your intro is way different from what I ever read, which I really love. I also like you didn't give too much background that goes on and on, and the story just gets boring after that. Your details are really good, to the point I can picture this in my mind.

I really like this, this different and I love different. And since it has something to do with being a Photographer I love it even more :)

Layout= beautiful, just getting that out there.
I love this, because you've transformed whats becoming a more common theme in Mibba into something entirely different, I love it.
So basically this was amazing and I'm subscribing :D

UGH, THIS WAS SO AWESOME. The colors just made me so happy and really added to my literary adventure. That's what I'm going to start calling "reading a story." I think it sounds way cooler.

Anyway, I really, really liked this. Like I can't even tell you how much I liked this. Just the small things about this made it awesome. Like, when you described how Chris looked angry as he "shoved" your picture down the table. I can just see that perfectly! Your imagery is nothing short of absolutely amazing.

I'm subscribing, most definitely. And thank you so much for putting my link in the author's note! :')

I like the colors in this! I've always been a sucker for space/nebula backgrounds. You could probably shorten up the summary a bit, because some of the information you put there seems a little irrelevant to the point of the story, but I can see why you put it there because you wanted to lead up to her being a photographer and everything.

"But I didn't like to photography just anything." Take that silly little letter out!

And I think you could probably get rid of the last sentence, "And no, for the record, I'm not a groupie." I think it would be better if you just ended the summary with this mysterious guy who caught her eye. Leave us wondering about that! ;D