Prince S. - Comments

i love it. i can see it play out in my head like a movie, which i like. you are an extreamly talented writter.

Clever title my friend, very clever. :D
I love the banner and the layout is very pretty and easy to read. It fits well to the story too.
I really liked the prologue it sets up the story nicely and well written.
Reading the next few chapters one of your strong points is how you describe the characters and how well you get across Amelia's feelings. I really liked the way you wrote and ended chapter 3. I like how you made your character contemplate their choice and then go with it again because of Adele. This is amazing so far I'm definitely subscribing I wanna see where this goes so badly so update soon please!!!

I like the layout and the introdution was good and the pic went really well too
Please update this soon as this is a really great story so far and I want to see where this go's

First of all, clever title and beautiful layout. The picture fits well and I had no problem reading it (I've seen a lot of layouts lately that I can't read, so thank you!) also, I have to say I've never seen a story with this kind of plot, so props to you for being original!

The prologue was good and it helped set up the story, although it felt to me like a normal chapter and not a prologue. I also noticed that your strong point defiantly is how you describe your characters. You do a good job giving the reader a full physical description without using too many descriptive cliches. I think you could of added some more personality description too, but the way you are describing the charters now is fine too.

You keep the story moving along at a good pace. I wasn't bored by it at all and I never thought, we've been here too long let's move on. I do think though that you're missing something...I don't know, to me, Amelia, now sebastian, seems like a distant main character. I didn't feel like I could really get into the story because I couldn't relate and sympathize with him. I think you could fix this by giving him a little more feeling, which would be easy, since you're writing it in first person.

No grammatical mistakes were found, good job! great story so far, cant wait to see what you write next!

I'm so sorry for the late comment. I was at school all day, and I came back and got your comment. It really made me smile and I love the amount of detail you put into it. :) Anyway, I'm off to commenting.

Before I actually read the story, I just glanced at the title and right away, it just caught my attention, because of the whole 'Prince S' part, because it's like a play on words, on the word 'princess' and it could be somebody's title 'Prince S'. Ahaha, to my surprise, I was right which I'm really surprised because I'm never usually right. I really like your layout by the way, it's just so light-hearted and fun and so pretty and blue, and I like the definitions in the summary. It just leaves you hanging and wondering what's going to become of Princess Amelia :D

Oh god, I'm just in love with your writing. You have fantastic descriptions, they just flow with ease and actually add to the story, unlike mine. They're descriptive to the point that it just sucks you into the world and you can just easily imagine what's going on, rather than being overwhelmed. Awh, I don't know why but the loss of Amelia's mother's beauty was something that really stood out for me in the prologue, it just really highlights the fact that even though you are young and beautiful now, you won't be beautiful as time passes. My goodness, I'm actually surprised that Amelia's father came up with the plan, I thought it was something that the daughter did on her own, ahah.

You know...I like how this is a princessy/princey story and is set in a royal setting, you don't use any fancy, flowery language that just confuses the reader. You're formal enough, but you use simpler language that still matches the setting you've got going on in the story and it doesn't confuse the reader. You made me giggle when I read about the servant girl Amelia being all scared when she comes across Amelia 'hanging' herself, it was a twist of comedy that just immediately livened up the story, while actually being vital to the plot line. I feel bad for her, she has to leave her old life behind to start a new one, that would be horrible. Though I'm curious to know how she copes with being Sebastian :D

You have a wonderful story right here, and it's brimming to the top with potential. You're a great writer, and I would definitely be subscribing. <3 Great job, update soon? :)

I don't have as much to say as everyone else. I'm no good at giving great feedback but i thoroughly enjoyed this story, it's well written and flows nicely.
I shall subscribe and i look forward to reading the next chapter :3

I really like your title. xD

I like the prolouge. I think it does a nice job of setting up the story, and makes it clear that the change that the princess talkns about is something that she really wants, as opposed to something that is being forced upon her. I do think that your transitions could be a little better though. It just seemed like all of a sudden, she was doing something else and there wasn't really a reason.

The whole concept for this story is brilliant. I wish you luck!

The story line is defiantly something I've never seen before. I like how, in the beginning, you told how she hated being a girl, her long hair and such. And then I was a bit confused as to why she needed to become a boy; if it was her idea or her parents'. I personally think girls would do a pretty badass job of ruling a country, but people did not always seem so, it appears. :3

Your writing style is very smooth and flow-y. I also really adore the layout. C:

Story: I was caught in by the first word. I've never read anything like this. You put in plenty of detail which I enjoyed. I didn't see any grammer/spelling errors either. I've never before read anything like this. Its so original.
Layout: I really love it. Its so very simple and doesn't draw my attention away from the story itself.

First off, I love the layout. It went perfectly with the story. Second, the story is pure awesomeness. I know, I could use a more decent word, but nothing is better than awesomeness.

Anyway, I love the fact that it's so original. It's your own story. I have never read something that's even close to this. I love it.

I also love the fact that it actually sounds like it's a guy in a woman's body that's speaking. This makes it really realistic. I'm subscribing..!

Awww! That banner is so adorable! =D It really stood out and made me smile. The layout is awesome. It’s so blue and pretty! You really know how to make your layouts, don’t you? :) The summary maybe short but I love it. It doesn’t give away anything. But that’s how a summary should be. :)

Prologue:
I like how you jump into the description of things, especially of the princess/prince staring at himself in the mirror. :) I’ve barely started this chapter but she sounds adorable and sad.

There just aren’t enough words to describe how much I love this story. I hope that you’ll update it soon! All of Sebastion/Amelia’s emotions show real well. I’m feeling his pain! And the way his father suddenly decided to allow her to be a boy, that was an unexpected twist.

I hope things will work out in the end for Sebastion. I really love this story, Bro. You did a lovely job on writing it. :) I am subbing!

First off, you deserve an applause for the title. It's so witty and catchy, I love it!

Your plotline is so interesting and unique! I've read my share of stories about princess', and I pretty much hated all of them, since they were all so proper about everything, and the plotlines were all pretty much the same. I love how this story is proper, but in a way... not too formal. I'm probably not making much sense...oh well. A few sentences packed with an enormous amount of adjectives, but other then that I have no critiques. I love this story, and I'm definitely subscribing (:

You had me at the title :P Clever.
I really enjoy this story line, I think it'll turn out amazing! I hope you keep writting on it :]

Lol, the title made me laugh. Quite witty xD And I love the layout. It is just simple and the banner obviously goes with the theme part of the story.

As for the plot and actual story, I love it. I am so sick of reading about petty problems that some princess goes through. This, at least, has a solid, unique plotline.

I love your writing. You use so much description, but not too much wheere it is boring. It is definitely an interesting start to an awesome story. :D

Title: I like it. It took me a minute to figure it out, but once I said it ooutloud, it made complete sense :tehe:
The layout: I love the banner picture. I think it suits this very well. The layout is very easy to read, which is, obviously, a good thing.
The story: First of all, this is a seriously amazing story idea. Very original. I like it(: I did not see any grammar or spelling errors so good job. I am going to say this again... I absolutely love this idea! Haha. I guess that's it(: