Aw, I thought this was adorable. I loved the description you used, you're writing is really amazing you know :3 In the first paragraph I loved the repitition of 'I come home', I thought it made it flow really well in a really unique way, and I can't quite put my finger on what it is that makes your writing so good. Just the way you phrase everything. a soft snore comes from them as well as a small dribble of drool. ~ I loved this line. So much of the description of the female made her sound so perfect and the kind of girl that a lot of people want or want to be, and then this line just added a little bit of realism and made me smile. It was adorable.
a soft snore comes from them as well as a small dribble of drool. ~ I loved this line. So much of the description of the female made her sound so perfect and the kind of girl that a lot of people want or want to be, and then this line just added a little bit of realism and made me smile. It was adorable.