Crave. - Comments

The layout is very simple and very lovely. The one simple line you have as a summary is a wonderful choice. It makes me want to read it. It makes me already connect on some sort of level. I also really like the picture that you have chosen. I think it is setting up the tone very nicely for this piece.

Crave:
This was wonderful. Very short, very simple, very sweet. I think it is incredible when an author can set up such a crystal clear image in my head in only, what, eight-nine words. This was a treat to read. Loved it!

I like how you've started this with a question; it really captures the reader's attention. I also really like how it's a rhetorical question and how you seem to answer it with another rhetorical question.

There's a lot of emotion in this, considering how short it is and I really, really like that. You've made an impact on the reader without overwhelming them with copious amounts of description. The simplicity of this is lovely and it makes me want to know more about the character(s).

I love the layout, too. The colours are beautiful and the picture matches the story perfectly. To me, it turned the story into the thoughts of one of the people.

I really enjoyed this. :3

I know it is a drabble, but I was completely shocked at how short and sweet it actually was. Technically, I believe this is the true definition of a drabble anyway. It's able to capture a reader quickly and leave them wanting more. I think the layout is short and sweet as well. The colors match the picture very nicely. I think this is a commonly expressed feeling. Sometimes people fall dependent on others and use them like a crutch. I can see this being a prologue to a story, but it could easily stand alone in a one-shot or a possible short story. It holds a lot of mystery in a few short words. Very nice job.