November 18th, 2011 at 10:44pm
*sadness*
First time I listened to that song, I cried. It was such a good song T^T
Nice, simple layout. Your story though was a bit rushed. I couldn't really get into her emotions because you didn't describe them well enough. I also think that his (whatever the thing on his grave is) should be italicized so it's different from the story, so we know it's on his tombstone. More imagery and maybe some of those fancy words added to this would make it sound beautiful.
Good job though <3
Like in my last comment, this is really sad.
It has a good... Plot, I guess. Like I'll tell him you're a hero", it just sets the perfect mood for the story.
For the title, though, I would capitalize it like this: I'll Tell Him You're a Hero.
I really like this :'D