Meant for Something Bigger - Comments

The intro has me allured more than anything but the first chapter is pretty nice and sets up the character well. I think some of the transitions between paragraphs could be a little more smooth but over all it's well written and I can honestly I'm really really curious where it is gonna go cause I have like a bunch of ideas I want to know if they are right or wrong lol.

Hm... sounds interesting.
Can't wait to see what all you have in store for this! :D
Definitely... subscribed!

I want to read more of this story, like really. I'm, I don't know the right word, but entranced? I'm curious about what will progress from this.

I definitely enjoyed this. The layout lent to the story and took nothing away, perfectly complimenting it. Your grammar was very good with a few exceptions, but those were probably just mistakes and nothing a good close read can't fix. You did a good job with setting up rounded characters and introducing them to the readers. Good job!

I liked the layout, it's beautiful.

The story itself is cute. Though I didn't understand it at first. lol.

But I loved the fact that it seemed so real. I mean, teachers with meter sticks always enter my mind. :p Anyway, I found this story lovely and sweet. It has it's little twists to it and it's just in the first chapter.

So, please, if this isn't a one-shot, update. I look forward to it.

As for grammar mistakes, I didn't spot any.

I like the layout. It's nice and simple, and it isn't distracting from the story. One thing I would fix about it though, is that your banner isn't as wide as the story section itself, so it looks a little odd in that way. But that's something that can be easily fixed, if you so wish.

At first I was a little confused, what with the turkey dinner and the perfection, and then the school bell? But then I got it. I liked that you talked about how perfection never stays long and then BAM she wakes up to some grumpy old teacher, holding a meter stick like a weapon. I also like her name. Breanna-Nicole Hannah. It just has a certain flow to it. And it rhymes. ^-^

I like that her name sounds so sweet, but she's kind of a bad-girl type. I just really like bad characters who don't do what they're told. ;) You're writing is very nice. Your grammar and everything is pretty good. I did find a few minor mistakes, though, so you might want to go through it again. I'm not going to point them out exactly because that's not my job. ;D But I like the flow of conversation between Breeni (great nickname, by the way) and Nadia. It's just really easy. And that's how it should be between good friends!

I don't know if this is just the first chapter of a story or what. I think it is. It should be. Because as a one-shot, it doesn't do well enough to stand on its own, I think. So I'm just guessing that it's the first chapter of a longer story here. Good job with this, though! You're a good writer. (:

I like th layout (not so keen on the colour pink though) but oh well it your choice and it go's well I like the ring as well and from that chapter I want to see where it go's from there, really good

For the beginning of a story, it really pulls a reader in! <3
I absolutely loved the banner! Even though I'm kind of weird about jewelry, I really liked the ring (and I'm not partial to pink) But the ring was beautiful XD.
The layout was simple, and that made it very easy to read! <3

It was a fast read, but I went back and read it again just to comprehend it. I really want to know what these nightmares mean for Breei (I really, really hope I spelt her name correctly). Her dream in class seemed very peaceful and just ideal, so I was wondering what her friend had meant when she had brought up the nightmares.

And I feel her pain definitely. I've fallen asleep in Spanish class more times than I can count. XD
Thankfully I have yet to be threatened to be held back.

The way you phrased it, "Sweet dreams, but minimal learning"? I think? That was awesome! It made me laugh!

I'm curious as to what happened to her biological parents, and what exactly is the problem with her foster parents. The way she described her social worker made him seem kinda... nice but a pushover.

The description and flow of the story was very nice as well. It had a lovely rhythm, and I really enjoyed reading it. This is certainly a story I will be subscribing to and waiting with anticipation to continue reading.~

I like the simple easy-to-read layout, I want that ring though...! That's funny, my middle name is Breanna, so nice choice of names, I like the concept, the summary made me think this would be about special needs kids though, but this is still good, Breanna seems like a 'I'm always bored' type of girl and that's me, I could really relate to her, which is good, makes me want to read more. I do hope you update, this is good, I really want to know what happened to her parents and the nightmares? what where they about...spooky. UPDATE SOON, well done.

I really like the layout, though I think it would look a little bit better if you centered the picture of the ring and that chapter titles. That may be just me though. I didn't really see many mistakes in grammar, and in a way, your writing reminds me of my own. Good job with spelling and grammar.

I would really like to see elaboration on the nightmares and I'm dying to know what happened to her parents. I think that the first paragraph was a brilliant way to trick the reader into thinking it'll be a happily ever after story, until you find out it's actually a dream. I like it, and I can't wait to read more :)

Nightmares? What nightmares?! Ahhh, I want to know more! I liked the beginning--what with the mention of such a lovely feast and all. Made me kind of hungry. The way you made everything so real also adds to the effect. Breanna is actually one of my friend's names. And she is mostly the same way--always falling asleep in class and forgetting her homework. lol, right on the mark.

UPDATE SOON, SIS!

I like the simple background (even though I normally hate the color pink). The ring is really pretty, to!

Hmm, while the summary is confusing a little, it's confusing in just the right way--it make you wonder what is going on. What every single line means and has to do with the story in itself. It ties in really well with the story title, to!

UPDATE SOON, SIS! <3