This is an adorable piece. I imagine you got the idea from the picture – I think it’s such a beautiful and creative plotline for a drabble.
The dialogue introduction is really effective, you capture the reader with your first sentence – who are ‘they’ and what is it? You paint a clear picture of the characters actions, they seem very natural. The two characters interact really well together; you instantly get the sisterly relationship between them.
It’s such a beautiful idea, and I’m guessing it is inspired by the image. I love the magic and mystery in the piece, even though (I’m guessing) Lucy is young, at 18 I still felt drawn into the aurora of this story. The end line is perfect, this so beautiful and happy to read.
The dialogue introduction is really effective, you capture the reader with your first sentence – who are ‘they’ and what is it? You paint a clear picture of the characters actions, they seem very natural. The two characters interact really well together; you instantly get the sisterly relationship between them.
It’s such a beautiful idea, and I’m guessing it is inspired by the image. I love the magic and mystery in the piece, even though (I’m guessing) Lucy is young, at 18 I still felt drawn into the aurora of this story. The end line is perfect, this so beautiful and happy to read.
Great job