Back to You - Comments

  • Love it <3
    January 8th, 2013 at 08:05am
  • I remember I actually wrote a short part of a story that had like the SAME situation with the whole "Ryan is pissed at Brendon but with a few kisses Ryan is totally chill and they have nice make up sex" type of thing xD
    October 25th, 2011 at 04:07am
  • I find the Ryan is... style of writing to be pretty awkward but that might just be me.

    He was so used to having Brendon by his side every day that he almost didn’t know how to function without him. I like that line, I really do.

    Now, remember that you're trying to keep the characters real, and I honestly wouldn't see Ryan Ross, or any other band dude saying found it appropriate in casual conversation. Y'know, just something I thought I'd point out.

    As for everything else, I really really like how you described Ryan's reactions to everything.How despite the fact that I'm sure he wanted to give in to everything and go for it, he still says no. Like any person who values themselves would.

    Overall this was cute, and with the ending that everyone would want. It's cute, though. I liked it :D
    October 25th, 2011 at 02:21am