Kelly Lawrence - Comments

I agree with tabula rosa when she said that it was not making sense that much. Maybe, it was just because of the descriptions that made it hard for us to decipher because you used lots of imagery here.

But that was the best part of all. In such a way you had made it so poetic that had just brought me alive.

I loved Kelly Lawrence. To be honest, I had no idea that he was a guy but thanks for reminding us in your author's note.

It was a heart-warming read. I give this a thumbs-up!

As you said in that last chapter, this didn't make any sense. But for some reason, I love it. I love that it doesn't make sense... it just works. I feel like it helps portray Kelly as someone who's just lost and confused and doesn't really know where his life is going.

Your descriptions are just wonderful as well. When I first started reading, I thought it may be too much, but the more I read, again, the more it just made sense to the story and the character. This story was just put together so well. Though there is not much to it, it just seems like there is so much more to what is actually there... if that makes sense.

I enjoyed how you broke it up into short chapters as well. It definitely made it easier to read because there is just so much to your descriptions. This was a wonderful piece and I really enjoyed reading it!

I love this. It's so well written. It doesn't make much sense but at the same time it does. Absolutely brilliant.

I really like this :] its really interesting… I love a layout too…. Just a suggestion though… maybe change the name of the story…? No offence but it kiinda made me not want to read the story… im glad I did read it though! It was great! Love it so far

You are an amazing writer, I really like your style. Personally I'm more of a fan of first person writing styles, but you made this work really well. I haven't yet got a chance to look at your other writing but I'm sure than when I get the chance - when I have finished exam period preferably then I shall be sure to check anything else. I'll confess I didn't have chance to read all this, and this is just a quickly scrawled comment, but I think you're a great writer.

Ah, I just saw this was updated. Still loving it, especially how Kelly describes tattoos. :)

I really like this. It's really really good. I like how it's vague, yet extremely descriptive at the same time, if that makes any sense. And did you mead he died his hair?

wow, this is fab! its really interesting, and a bit confusing :P i love it, can't wait for more! :) xx

Just hit chapter 3 and I now realize he's a boy. Sorry.
Writing's still fantastic and I love the Nirvana lyrics in the summary. I knew I'd forgotten to mention something...

I've read only the first chapter so far, but it was with my mouth hanging open. I fell in love with the way the words sounded and Kelly seems pretty interesting. I like how she brought a different perspective to growing up and reading her thoughts is like reading poetry.
Really great so far. Subscribed.

i love your writing style. its very different and im enjoying this story a lot.

i love your writing style. its very different and im enjoying this story a lot.

I like the lack of dialogue/how Kelly is thinking the dialogue. He has a very interesting way of looking at things.

Your profile picture tied in with the first chapter so well. I also really liked the quote you used for the summary. Was it something you wrote, from the theme of your story, or by someone else? I also really like how the rest of your layout is so simple, but pretty and lets your writing speak for itself.

I couldn't see a single misspelling. I loved how carefully you chose your words. It was almost like reading freestyle poetry.

"He got lost in the cities with the lights and the drugs and the pretty woman with eyelashes thick like scars and smiles red with mislead blood." This was an absolutely amazing example of the imagery in your story. It's completely unique and I love reading descriptions that are new and not at all cliche.

I like how you can make this story angsty without any of the normal "I hate my life" kind of stuff. It's great how Kelly doesn't seem like she's trying to prove anything to anyone and doesn't pretend to be anything that she's not.

The only thing I'm a little worried about is your lack of dialogue. In future chapters, it might be diffilcult to move the plot along if everything is in Kelly's head.

I'm really curious to see what's going to happen next and this seems like a great start. :)

Ack, sorry about taking a bit to comment on this :( I've had a horrible week >_< Anyways, I haven't even started reading this and I'm already excited for it. Just judging by the summary and the layout, I can already tell that I'm going to enjoy this c: Moving onto the review!

I really love how you describe the setting in the first chapter, and especially how you describe the feeling of growing up and changes. Your writing style is immaculate; I can find absolutely no flaw in this piece and I can barely find any useful word to describe how beautiful all of this is, despite this melancholy in it. I think the second chapter has to be my favorite, how Kelly simply tapping a pencil against her desk causes the teacher to be angry with her and send her from the classroom. I think that this sentence pretty much sums up my love for this story, "Life’s hard and schools harder and the drugs are harder still but that’s okay because their dealer is always going to catch them while their boss and their teacher run to the law.It’s okay, I got you, take some more – it’ll make you feel better." You describe this world that she's in so perfectly. Like I said, I can't find any flaws in this. I'm in awe.

This is beautiful. I'm subbing and will be waiting to find out more about Kelly's life. Amazing job, lovely! <3

Your writing style is awesome. I am intrigued muchly. Update soon? :)