I loved this! You managed to really develop your character and their relationship in just one-shot and I that made me as a reader connect better with them and the story, it was easy to imagine what came before the night that you narrate in the story. I usually don't like changes in the POV but in this case it works perfectly, and it shows how well thought the story is. As for the use of the prompt, I liked how you incorporated it, particularly at the end when she gives him the present. It's wonderfully written entry and I loved the flows really nicely, it kept me entertained and I kind of didn't want it to end. Anyways, great job! And thanks for the awesome entry ;)
October 25th, 2011 at 04:23am