The layout’s okay. I’m not a huge fan of the Pepto pink, but as far as structure goes, it’s not bad—very simple and easy to read. I like that the story area is so skinny, too. I always thought that looked cool, but it just doesn’t work with full length stories.
Your summary was honest: this was cheesy and cliché, but it was cute. I like your choice of names. They’re less common, but they work well in a romance story. There isn’t a lot of description going on here, but this is one of the rare cases I think you can get away with that: if your speaker’s nursing a slight hangover, she isn’t going to be describing the party or the people or what was said and who to—she’s going to be fighting to remember the bare bones of the previous night’s happenings.
I really want to say more about this, but your grammar and syntax make this really hard to read. I get the general idea—she wakes up, remembers they spiked and drank punch, had a “candlelit dinner” followed by Happy Birthday on the guitar, and danced—but specifics are hard to give. If you’d like me to proof this for a repost, I’d be more than willing. Just let me know.
Requirements Met: 500 word cap, word count on summary, link to contest in summary/author’s note, photo in layout/author’s note, readable layout
Your summary was honest: this was cheesy and cliché, but it was cute. I like your choice of names. They’re less common, but they work well in a romance story. There isn’t a lot of description going on here, but this is one of the rare cases I think you can get away with that: if your speaker’s nursing a slight hangover, she isn’t going to be describing the party or the people or what was said and who to—she’s going to be fighting to remember the bare bones of the previous night’s happenings.
I really want to say more about this, but your grammar and syntax make this really hard to read. I get the general idea—she wakes up, remembers they spiked and drank punch, had a “candlelit dinner” followed by Happy Birthday on the guitar, and danced—but specifics are hard to give. If you’d like me to proof this for a repost, I’d be more than willing. Just let me know.
Requirements Met: 500 word cap, word count on summary, link to contest in summary/author’s note, photo in layout/author’s note, readable layout
Requirements Missed: grammar and spelling
Brownie Points: original layout