In My Head. - Comments

First off, I like the titles. I always get a little stumped when it comes to naming the chapter of my one-shots. Your story and chapter titles made a cool repetition, too. And the banner was a good extension of that. Kudos. I also love the color scheme. It’s a very simple look, but I like it.

You have some really great adjectives. You have no idea how excited that made me! “clutching at my heart” and “kissing the scars” made me go ooooooo. That was my favorite part. This story reads a lot like a journal at first glance, but the adjectives give it that extra boost, so awesome job. The whole thing is very honest—changed people and looking back on relationships. The analysis of the kiss was a GREAT detail. I feel like that’s not one most people write about, but it’s definitely a very realistic touch.

Some of your figurative language confused me at first. I had to read it a couple times before I really got it, but I’m not so sure that’s a bad thing. Drabbles are supposed to be short, “out of the norm” pieces (at least I think they are). The only thing I really suggest is giving it a good read-through. You have a few misspelled words and comma-splices. Picky grammatical stuff. Nicely done!

I really like this. Your writing is beautiful and just right. You completely nailed the tone of this piece. I just would like to let you know that I really felt it. You made me feel what you were describing, and that's just absolutely brilliant.
additional notes:
Perhaps silent tears are emotionless, or perhaps they’re filled with emotion.
-I love propositions like this. They're either this or they're maybe the opposite entirely, or somehow paradoxically a bit of both. It makes for a great opener; it hooked me right off the bat.
“We have twin cores,” you’d say, ‘We’re meant to be.”
-I totally took twin cores to be a Harry Potter reference. I might just be an uber-nerd here though. xD
I could see your affections in your eyes back then, but the flag I set has been discarded, and now I’m staring out at unmarked territory.
-I love the metaphor in this. It's very powerful and, I think, very fitting as well.
You can’t find the soul behind the eyes, the passion in the kiss or the meaning behind the words.
-This is, at least to me, exactly spot on. You described the feeling so perfectly, that moment when you realize that the person you thought you knew so well was maybe not someone you knew so well. That awareness taints even the best memories, so you can never quite see them the same or without odd feelings in your guts. You just put it all into better words than I have ever been able to manage.

Well, I've rambled enough frankly. Well done, and keep up the good work. Cheers. :)

I love the layout. The coloring is really pretty and works well with the girl's hair color. I like the zipper on her head as well, considering the title is "in my head". That was a nice touch.

Great layout, personally! :)