Worth It - Comments

I really liked this two shot and I'm never a fan of them but this was really well written and clever.

This two shot made me laugh my ass off. No lie, my Mom thought something was wrong with me all because of these two lines:

“What is all the noise out here?” Eric asked, eyes skipping between me and the...paper boy or whoever he was.

“Oh, and you? You’re the infamous draft pick my dad was talking about?” I rolled my eyes. “You look like you should be in the back of my car coming from the park. Maybe I’ll take you to the playground next time, and Parker can start in your place.”

I died, brilliant! Amaze-balls, I loved it!

I just peed. You are such a great writer omg. And you described Jeff PERFECTLY. exactly how I imagine him!

This was so sweet! I feel like it fits Jeff's persona so well, I can't totally picture him crushing on a girl like that. I like the way you wrote the relationship between them, it went very well with your given quote, and I absolutely adored Molly, great character. My favorite 'detail' was that she lied about having a boyfriend, it made the ending unpredictable and I loved that. I really enjoyed the first part, the one in Molly's POV and at first I was a little disappointed to see that you changed to third person but in the end I think you did what worked best with the story. Overall, I think it was very entertaining and I enjoyed the descriptions and the rhythm.
I can't believe this your first contest! You did a fantastic job, thank you for the great entry ;)

great job on this! I really enjoyed it!