The Consequences of Being a Bitch - Comments

I'm loving the honesty in your writing XD You should continue with it! I'm really loving it so far (:

This is so so good, it's refreshing to see a character that doesn't sidestep around what she wants to say, she just comes out and says it. Makes a change from a lot of other characters, which is brilliant. Like a lot of others have said, I know this was for NaNo 2011 but it would be great to see this updated again. :)

Dude, I'm SO in love with this. Jubilee is AMAZING. I love that she knows she's a bitch and doesn't just say that every other girl is without a reason. I mean, we really ARE all bitches.

I know that it was just for NaNo 2011, but I would really LOVE if you would someday update this again:D

Thank sweet baby Jesus that I am not the only one who thinks that way!

I agree with mellifluous about the girl thing. I was not expecting this. Not expecting this at all. :) I hope I'll see more of this story in the future. -Cyanide

Wow. This is seriously fantastic. I adore Jubilee. She has such a distinctive, honest voice, and she's so incensed about people and how much they suck and she's not even trying to excuse herself from the generalization that you can't help but back her.

And she's not only passionate about hating people, but she's passionate about the people she cares about too. She loves Gio so much - to the point where she'll put herself in the uncomfortable friendship with Stephanie, and kneeing that douche in the balls, which I'm assuming she got in quite a bit of trouble for.

I would really love to see more of this. I know it was for 2011 NaNo, but I hope you'll post more, and soon. Thank you for writing!

I miss this story!

I love it! it's honest, which is really important to me and it's solid. <3 Great story

One of Miles Cleary's sociopathic friends was named Jon Winchester which makes me think of John Winchester which makes me think of Supernatural. Mmm.

I really like Jubilee. She's a bitch, but she's a bitch that stands up for her friends. I like how she's loyal to Gio. I just love all your stories and you're such a good writer. Your style is so good and it's so easy to follow and read. Like some people use those giant paragraphs that take up the entire chapter and you wanna shoot yourself but yours are really nicely lengthened and it varies. I like how you make Jubilee swear a lot but you do it in a way that works not in a way that makes it super obvious that she's swearing every other word.

I want the rest of your NaNo story now please.

I have to admit that I was a bit hesitant about reading this when I saw that it was written from a girl's perspective. There are just many narratives about girls and almost all of them are similar in one way or another. But this piece you've written is different, Jubilee is different. She's blunt and values her friendship with Giovanni to the point that she'll befriend Stephanie - a girl who, and correct me if I'm wrong, she wouldn't normally be friends with - for him. I think that's what I like about her the most, her attitude. Another thing I like about her is the fact that she seems so real and that if you actually tried, you could find someone like her in real life. Composition wise, I love your style of writing. The sentences are concise and easy to read. The swear words are placed at the right places and they aren't used too often that it distracts me from the actual content. There are some parts that made me laugh and some that made me smile. I didn't catch any problems. All in all, you did an amazing job so far and I'm looking forward to your next update. Yes, that means I've subscribed to your story. (:

OhMyGod.
lol. I just love your language in this! So... futile! XD Did I spell that right? :P
Anyway, great job with the new chapter! :D Ooh... so now we really know what Stephanie did. :o And even though she didn't do anything herself, well, Janice Ian says it best:



lol. This is kind of ironic since I used a Mean Girls gif in the comment to your other story, but... welp. Oh well. That movie has the best quotes. XD
But really, ^ that's so true. lol.
Loved the update! Can't wait for more! :D

Shit just got real. I'm glad you gave some insight into why Jubilee thinks the way she does. And, damn. Poor Gio.

^^^^

That comment was supposed to be all loving, by the way. Just in case the picture came across wrong.lololol

I LOVE IT DUDE. God what's your name so I can make a shrine of you in my - erm derp I mean acquaint myself with you. No, really though, I do love you. Quite a lot. Because this story is just the fucking shit. How can she be such an awesome hoe while having the queerest name on the planet? She makes the name so un-queer. She makes it bitchin'. Cuz she's bitchin'.

This is a useless comment.

I just know that if you don't update this, I'm gonna pull a Jubi and knee you in the balls.

okay, yes, I'll admit it.
Gio just sounds like a big sweetheart-teddy bear hybrid, the poor guy :c
STUPID STEPHANIE.
you know what she is?
it's what comes out of a vagina.
a queef.
mhm.
mmmmmmmmmmmmhm.
please update soon, I Wanna Marry-Anna c:
this update was so perfect.

Chapter One:
I really like the first chapter, you begin to describe how the chick feels about all the other girls, I kind-of agree with her, we all are b*tches once in awhile. I love the banner, it really goes well with the whole story and all.

Chapter Two
I really like how you bring her back to kindergarten and she meets miss perfect girl carly, the one who lies with the bruise claiming from a bear, lol that was good. I love your detail in this chapter also.

Chapter Three:
Lol, she likes harry potter? I like that, I really love how you established her as a character, like she knows what's going on and is alert when shes talking to other people. I like how she tried to get a friend and is making it work when she really doesn't want to be friends, this was really good so far I hope you update soon (:

Layout/Summary: The layout is very superb, if I do say so myself. It's darkish colors with a nice font and comical, yet thought inducing banner. It induced my thoughts anyway. I really like the summary because it shows a lot of how she and her friend are like and it tells you just a little bit about Nick. I can't wait to begin reading!

Chapter One: I just have to say that I read "grinds my gears" exactly Peter Griffin xD And I have to say after only one chapter of this, I have found myself grinning like an idiot at the computer screen. I love that you clarified the different types of bitches and that all girls are at least one kind of them. I completely agree. Being a gay boy, I'm probably the bitchest girl I know (boy, but what's the difference) and I can spot a bitch a mile away. I've had my fair share of knowing how bitches act and I bet I can find similarities to my "friends" in this story xD

Also, I have to tell you that I very much loved the paragraph where she talked about the choice between a new boy and a new car xD And the one where she's all like; wah wah, cry me a river, etc. Completely funny and true!

Chapter Two: Reading this makes it hard to breathe, really! Like, WHAT IS OXYGEN? I jus can't right now. Just can't. This was truly funny because it showed a sense of maturity to children. I always was very intelligent as a kindergarden but all parents say is, "Oh, well you were a kid and you wouldn't have remembered that time and you weren't very smart or had good ideas." Yeah? Well I was smart enough to know which kids were probably getting beaten at home. I'm really happy Jubilee pushed Carly down. Mini-bitch deserved it. YOU DIDN'T GET ATTACKED BY A BEAR, BABY, I KNOW IT.

"I was above that shit. I ate glitter." - Favorite line ever!

Chapter Three: Good chapter, really, but a little less comical than the rest. But, I could feel it tugging me into the actual plot line and that was good. I have to say that I'm pretty sure Stephanie did it. I hate those "nice girl" types. Really. They'll act all buddy buddy with you, join every team and sport, and just strive for excellence when really, they just hate everyone around them and probably has a private blog where she insults everyone she knows and they don't know about it. I liked that we got to see what Gio is like a little -that hopelessly love-sick puppy, him- and he seems like a sweetie, really.

Only one thing seemed wrong to me in this chapter:

I continued the tradition until the end of freshman year until I was kicked out—er, I mean, until I quit.
^I'd consider changing that "until" to something like "when" or something along those lines. Other than that, no more mistakes.

Amazing story, you've earned my subscription!

Loved the update!
Aw, don't be so harsh on yourself! I thought the ending was good, really. :) And it leaves us wondering what's going on with Gio. :o
And did that Stephanie girl really do that? That was pretty bitchy. I mean, really. And she acts like she's her friend and all too... but then she goes and does that?
I'm accusing her though without proof, we don't know if she did it or not. :/
Anyway, great job with the update. You introduced Gio into the story, a new main character. :)
Can't wait for more! :D

I laughed. And laughed. And laughed. AND LAUGHED.
I love it. I love you for writing it.
Because it is so true.

OH MY GOD I LOL'D HARDCORE. I LOVE JUBILEE. JUST YES. ALL OF IT.
Just leave. I'm whining like a little bitch about all the little whiny bitches. I died. Oh my god. Too much love for this girl. Just all of it. Cry me a river. I CAN'T. Just all of it.
THIS IS TOO FUNNY.
TOO.
MUCH.
LOL.
I have lost the ability to can. But it's so true. We are bitches. Just all of it. It's great. I love this.

... mentally lesser kids. There should be a new word for how dead I am. I PUSHED THE BITCH DOWN. Hehehe, I don't know why, but reading this the only thing I could think of DON'T MAKE ME SNAP MY FINGERS IN A Z FORMATION. I love Jubilee holy shit.

The intricacies of Harry Potter. LET ME POUR MY HEART OUT ABOUT MY THOUGHTS ON IT. ONLY TRULY THEN, WILL WE BE FRIENDS.

While I know it pissed her off- I have to appreciate that kids determination. On every single article a dick was drawn. That's something. Really. AND AW. I LOVE GIO. I JUST LOVE CHICKEN SHIT CHARACTERS. AND BITCH CHARACTERS. SO I JUST LOVE THEM ALL.

I totally think it was Stephanie, maybe, hopefully. No one is that nice. Maybe. BUT DUDE. THE ENDING. YOU CAN'T JUST DO THAT. Of what's really going on with Gio. YOU CAN'T JUST END THERE LIKE NOTHING.
YOU CANNOT.
no but seriously I love this. I have so many emotions right now. If you couldn't tell.