It's You, I Suppose - Comments

This is written very well. I'm glad I don't have to point out thousands upon thousands of simple grammatical errors!

I think you could cut out the prologue altogether. Really. It's interesting, kind of. But I feel like you could just make the summary a little longer, and then just start right off with the first chapter. I think it's better to just dive in to a story instead of having to introduce the idea of it. That's what the summary is for. Often times as writers, we write a prologue thinking it's essential to a story, but it's really just essential to straighten things out in your mind before you delve into the story. Does that make sense? You kind of wrote it more for yourself than the reader. We don't really have to know any of that - or at least, not in that amount of detail. Condensing it and adding it to the summary you already have would do just fine.

Also, I think you should work on using more word variety. You use a lot of the same words, and it gets boring. You can liven things up with different word choices. You can even google the synonyms for a certain word for ideas.

Some of your sentences are a little awkward, at least for me.

"I was just wondering if you had it done if I could possibly look at it, at the beginning of class..."

If you say it out loud, it's just kind of awkward. There are some other instances of this throughout what I've read so far. I'm not sure if you even care about if your sentences are awkward or not, but keep an eye out for it in the future. Saying things out loud, especially dialogue, can help with that.

"..the entire lunch room stood up as if we were all connected to puppet strings." I really like that comparison!

This seems like a typical kind of love story. Hope you throw in some plot twists so it's not just another love story. (:

This is an awsome story. Great job!

I do believe, darling, that ok should be okay. But otherwise, these updates are great.

I only read the first two chapters and I can already tell that I am going to enjoy reading the rest of the story.

I was so pleased to find three new chapters to read, truly. I'm so interested in Ella and Matt's story. What happened with them? How did she end up with Luke? Why didn't she end up with Matt? So many questions, I can't wait to find out answers!

One small thing, though. You might want to say something at the beginning of the fifth chapter stating that it's Matt's point-of-view. Even just his name in italics would clarify. For someone like me, reading a few chapters at a time, suddenly having it switch up was a little disarming.

This is still gorgeous, though, and I hope you update again soon. (:

I was so pleased to find three new chapters to read, truly. I'm so interested in Ella and Matt's story. What happened with them? How did she end up with Luke? Why didn't she end up with Matt? So many questions, I can't wait to find out answers!

One small thing, though. You might want to say something at the beginning of the fifth chapter stating that it's Matt's point-of-view. Even just his name in italics would clarify. For someone like me, reading a few chapters at a time, suddenly having it switch up was a little disarming.

This is still gorgeous, though, and I hope you update again soon. (:

This is really, really good. You definitely write in a very coherent and intelligent way. Your characters are intriguing, and even though there's that bit of cliche - falling in love with the boyfriend's best friend - this is still amazing. No plot is really original anymore; what makes a story original is the way the author portrays it. And you've definitely portrayed this story well. I really like the personality of the characters so far, and you've definitely got those sweet moments pinned down.
I was a bit confused with chapter five, I'll admit. I understood that you want to tell Matt's side of the story, but it seemed a bit odd to switch to his side after going on from Ella's side. But, I have faith that you'll go on and it won't be confusing. You write so well that I can't doubt that.
Good job and good luck.

The layout is amazing, the plot is amazing... Every single thing about this story is just amazing! You got me hooked from the start. I really like your way of writing. You're doing great so far, keep it up! In your last chapter I was lst at first, but then when I read the last line I got it and I thought: awwww, this story is so cute!

I'm going to suscribe and try to keep up with this. That is if there is more coming... There IS more coming right?! Lol I am such a freak xD

First off, I'm only doing the first three chapters in this little comment, since that's all we swapped for. I just want to be fair. If I read the fourth, it will be in private. Anyway, sorry this has taken so long, so without farther ado, here we go!

Layout/Summary: The layout is elegant and doesn't distract me from the text of the story/summary. The banner was pretty and cute. And the summary was short, sweet, and encouraged me to start in with the story. Superb job!

Chapter One: First off, let's get to what I found good about this chapter. It was well worded, though in some places it didn't really fit well, but it wasn't that noticeable. Also, I really liked this chapter because I have felt the way this narrator(I'm assuming it's a she?) is feeling now, so it was relatable. As for story content, this chapter was very well put together. Now for some things that need correcting:

* He's was one of those romantic types.
^ Either take out was or drop the 's. And since the chapter is in past tense, you should drop the 's.

* When one reads the words he has so careful selected...
^ Should change careful to carefully.

Well that's it for this chapter. Onto the next!

Chapter Two: Okay, this was a good chapter. Nice descriptions and word flow. It all flowed from one place to the next and it was very relatable to actual high school boys- which is kind of important to me. And I sense Ella is going to be a cheater! (Just kidding, but I know something has to happen.) Onto the criticism:

* "Yeah, I didn't want you guys to feel like had forgotten about you,"
^ I'd put a we or I between like and had.

And another thing: it's really common for people to italicize thoughts. Like: Today was a good day, I thought.

Other than that, excellent work!

Chapter Three: Another good chapter. Again, I just want to point out the thoughts being italicized thing. You don't have to use it, but it would let the reader know what is a thought before reaching the words, 'I Thought.' Just reading this chapter made me interested to see what had happened between Matt and Ella. In fact I'm still wandering. I have a feeling that she might end up hurting Luke somehow or herself in some way.

No mistakes to point out this time. Fantastic story!

This so far is fantastic.

The layout is beautiful. That's really all I have to say about that. (:

You really do have a way with words. The feelings and emotions were expressed very deeply and very well. It's actually written the way I'd expect a published book to be written. Very well, of course. The second chapter definitely leads in with more information and clears up a few things. Of course, I cant see how being in love with her boyfriends best friend is going to go very well. I can predict that's not going to work out, for someone at least.

You've done a very good job. I didn't see any errors either. It was a wonderful and interesting read. xD

Background: I loved the background. It made it easy for me to read the story
Banner: I thought the banner went along nicely with the story.
Story content: I loved the plot and characters. I can't wait to read more.

Layout: wahhh. Such a pretty layout! I can't make layouts like that for some strange (obviously cause I'm not an awesome layout maker) reason xD Bonus points cause it's readable AND pretty.

Summary: It's not all that ''hooking'', or eye catching. It seems a bit like a good old love story. Usually, I would skp right over this because I am not a HUGE fan of romance.

Chapter 1: I see a slight mistake. Boys who kept my eyes from straying to you. Before you said ''him'', but now it is like you are directly talking to him. You go on like this. This threw off a bit, and it probably doesn't bother much people, but it would make a lot more sense if you changed it. Maybe you meant for it to be this way? Or maybe it's just my preferences? But I would much prefer it if you changed it.

By reading your first chapter, I have established what I like/think you can improve in your writing. I just love, love, love, love your flow with words. The first paragraph? Oh good God, it was beautiful. Pure poetry. It flowed really really well and painted a vivid image in my head. I kind of wished you used more detail though.

Also, I find a few mistakes here and there. Some missing commas and uncapitalized words that I think should be. Nothing big, and probably nothing to worry about.

I'm not going to subscribe because romance stories aren't really my genre, but it's a good story and plot nonetheless.

Happy writing ^_^

Awh. The summary is great. I like the layout, and I like how soft it feels. This is so adorable.

The first thought that slammed itself into my brain was 'WOAH.' and then 'highly intelligent'. For some reason this caught something in my brain and clutched on to it. It made me love this story from the very first paragraph. This is quite seriously a beautiful piece of work. Some parts of it could do with a little sentence shortening (only because all long sentences kind of lose the rhythm a true story holds). And not that this isn't a true story, because it is. I don't think I've come across writing such as this on this whole website. I think that just from the first chapter, this could be something great.

Your writing seems almost too great for a story about love. And I know that love is very important, and very great, but the writing you have done here, it seems even better. As I move to the second chapter, all of these feelings stay. And I like that I don't know much about the characters, but I feel like I definitely will as it moves on. However, some moments were a bit too dramatic for my taste. But they fit perfectly, still.

The third chapter was even better, because it revealed a little tiny bit. It's like you're teasing the reader, letting them know a little but not enough to walk away. I like how you've placed this Matt. I like the way he's been made. And I like this girl, she seems very interesting. This is all so interesting. I love your writing. It makes me feel nice.

This could definitely be a published novel.
Subscribing.

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Update soon?

Aww this was so sweet.
It made me think of my soul mate and I can relate to it so much.

You have a great way with portraying emotions and a good way with words, bravo.
I don't think I was bothered with anything in the story, the flow was nice and I didn't get caught up in the words once.
And it rarely happens that a story pulls me in so much, that I don't even pay attention to the grammar, so I wouldn't know if you had any mistakes.

I simply love it,
+ I'm subscribing. :)

Adorable layout! It fits well with the story and is just generally cute.

This is a good first chapter. I enjoyed the descriptions of her feelings towards him and the image her affections put in my mind. You've done a good job with descriptions and the right amount of detail. The only thing that distracted me was the punctuation; I saw a lot of commas and I feel like there were maybe too many.

Other than that, great job!

I really cannot say anything about the writing... Since I did not see any grammar and or spelling mistakes.
The story itself, though, is really nice. I love the idea and what you are writing about, and there is a lot there. There is a lot of detail and a lot of information to convince me to keep reading your story.
I suggest creating a layout specifically for this story, though, a lot of people do not really like Mibba's pre-made layouts. Yes, they are readable, but not exactly... Attractive.
Over all, really good story. I didn't see many errors.
Good job(:

This is really good so far. If you want this to me a one shot a short summery would be a good idea. The spelling is good but you do have a few grammar mistakes, nothing a quick read over wouldn't fix. :)
This would be an awesome summery for a chapter story if you made it a little shorter. Either way I really like what you have right now. The way you describe things pulll me into each thought you are writing about. You have got some great talent! Keep up the good work. I'm going to subscribe to this and see where it goes and what you chooses to do. This has inspired me to write more for a story I have started, thank-you! :D

Whoa, I really like the way this is written! Fancy, and although it's a simple plotline you keep the reader interested. Nice job!