Winning Against Myself - Comments

So when i first started in on this i was a bit worried it was going to be a kinda stereotypical love triangle thing. but now that i'm reading it, it seems really good. and i can't really wait to see more of it. i really like Daxus's character. Morpheas seems a little unstable though. (Not saying this is a bad thing for the story.) Your characters feel real and not artificial so that's a plus.

I love your writing, I like the description and the you set it out. It gives a sort of professional feel to it. Your first paragraph also really draws the reader in. I love your layout as well! Gorgeous

I don't know if you know or not but your title banner isn't showing up on this story. I figured I'd give you a heads up

What can I say that hasn't already been said?! ;D You are truly in your element when you are writing, please never ever ever stop! I was immediately drawn in with your title; it is the absolute perfect title for this story and I wouldn't have it any other way. As for the ending, it was pretty tragic and didn't really give you that light fluffy feeling in your stomach, but sometimes I think happy endings are predictable. No one likes a predictable book. Never ever stop writing, you are extremely gifted!

Wishing you all the best!

Olivia

What can I say that hasn't already been said?! ;D You are truly in your element when you are writing, please never ever ever stop! I was immediately drawn in with your title; it is the absolute perfect title for this story and I wouldn't have it any other way. As for the ending, it was pretty tragic and didn't really give you that light fluffy feeling in your stomach, but sometimes I think happy endings are predictable. No one likes a predictable book. Never ever stop writing, you are extremely gifted!

Wishing you all the best!

Olivia

Wow, the ending was pretty shocking, I must say. Lol I enjoyed this, but there were quite a few things that I found hard to read grammar-wise. The sentences were a little bland, just straight to the point, one sentence after another. I don't really know how to explain it! Like instead of saying:

The dog was big and black, and had eyes that glowed in the night.

You would say:

The dog was big and black. He had eyes that glowed in the night.

And there's nothing wrong with that, but it did make me get a bit bored while reading it. There were also a few times when you used words incorrectly, for instance, in the first chapter when you said: "Hello?" Daxus inquiries.

It should be inquired there instead of inquiries. Nothing huge, but just small things like that throughout the story. It was a wonderful story to read, though, despite the small errors. I was shocked at how it ended!

Keep up the good work; you're a very talented writer!

To tell you the truth I wasn't expecting that kind of ending. I thought it would be a happy ending but it turned out a bit tragic. I enjoyed reading this novel from when you started it till the very end. <33 You are an amazing author and I hope more people will enjoy your work like I do. Excellent story. :DDD

To tell you the truth I wasn't expecting that kind of ending. I thought it would be a happy ending but it turned out a bit tragic. I enjoyed reading this novel from when you started it till the very end. <33 You are an amazing author and I hope more people will enjoy your work like I do. Excellent story. :DDD

Damn! I wasn't expecting that kind of end but I loved it overall. The plane crush and Kendra naming her child with her ex-lover's name was fabulous. The epilogue was nicely written and I liked how it was written in a different POV from those four you kept writing all the time. All in all, loved it. XD

Damn! I wasn't expecting that kind of end but I loved it overall. The plane crush and Kendra naming her child with her ex-lover's name was fabulous. The epilogue was nicely written and I liked how it was written in a different POV from those four you kept writing all the time. All in all, loved it. XD

Damn! I wasn't expecting that kind of end but I loved it overall. The plane crush and Kendra naming her child with her ex-lover's name was fabulous. The epilogue was nicely written and I liked how it was written in a different POV from those four you kept writing all the time. All in all, loved it. XD

Damn! I wasn't expecting that kind of end but I loved it overall. The plane crush and Kendra naming her child with her ex-lover's name was fabulous. The epilogue was nicely written and I liked how it was written in a different POV from those four you kept writing all the time. All in all, loved it. XD

Damn! I wasn't expecting that kind of end but I loved it overall. The plane crush and Kendra naming her child with her ex-lover's name was fabulous. The epilogue was nicely written and I liked how it was written in a different POV from those four you kept writing all the time. All in all, loved it. XD

Damn! I wasn't expecting that kind of end but I loved it overall. The plane crush and Kendra naming her child with her ex-lover's name was fabulous. The epilogue was nicely written and I liked how it was written in a different POV from those four you kept writing all the time. All in all, loved it. XD

Damn! I wasn't expecting that kind of end but I loved it overall. The plane crush and Kendra naming her child with her ex-lover's name was fabulous. The epilogue was nicely written and I liked how it was written in a different POV from those four you kept writing all the time. All in all, loved it. XD

Damn! I wasn't expecting that kind of end but I loved it overall. The plane crush and Kendra naming her child with her ex-lover's name was fabulous. The epilogue was nicely written and I liked how it was written in a different POV from those four you kept writing all the time. All in all, loved it. XD

UPDATE!! <3
and more chapters. For sure. :D

Tragic are amazing, happy can also be good. So why not infuse the two? :3

Happy! happy ending please! I don't like sad ones :(

Update! I just now found your story, and i'm addicted!! Please, write more soon! <3