I really enjoyed this, if it's your first ever NC-17 you should be proud.
Your use of the kinks was well thought out and I like how they didn't really plan to be together, but they're good together so they keep having sex.
The inclusion of the female character made me laugh, I think that's an accurate description of how someone would react if they're fairly vanilla and going to buy sex toys.
The way you split this into two parts worked really well, and I'm glad that you wrote it this way.
On the whole I really liked it, thank you for entering the contest. xoxo
Your use of the kinks was well thought out and I like how they didn't really plan to be together, but they're good together so they keep having sex.
The inclusion of the female character made me laugh, I think that's an accurate description of how someone would react if they're fairly vanilla and going to buy sex toys.
The way you split this into two parts worked really well, and I'm glad that you wrote it this way.
On the whole I really liked it, thank you for entering the contest. xoxo