I really liked this - it was certainly a unique sort of story; not something I've ever seen before. I like the fact that the Aurora Borealis was in it (and I liked that you chose that picture, as I really wanted someone to write a story relating to the Northern Lights). I thought the fact that the mystery was never properly explained was really interesting, and how, at the end, Gareth just disappeared, and no one really knew why. However, I thought that the dialogue when Gareth first arrived was a bit long, and a bit repetitive - there were a lot of mentions of how Gareth was back, but he should be dead, and no one knew why. I also noticed a few mistakes between the past and present tense, but other than that, there were no spelling or grammar mistakes. Overall, a very good entry! :D
I really liked this - it was certainly a unique sort of story; not something I've ever seen before. I like the fact that the Aurora Borealis was in it (and I liked that you chose that picture, as I really wanted someone to write a story relating to the Northern Lights). I thought the fact that the mystery was never properly explained was really interesting, and how, at the end, Gareth just disappeared, and no one really knew why. However, I thought that the dialogue when Gareth first arrived was a bit long, and a bit repetitive - there were a lot of mentions of how Gareth was back, but he should be dead, and no one knew why. I also noticed a few mistakes between the past and present tense, but other than that, there were no spelling or grammar mistakes. Overall, a very good entry! :D