This is a fantastic story! I sometimes get a little confused with the current and flashback scenes (maybe you could make the "flashback" writing a little more visible?) But this is great. It's not often you see these kinds of struggles portrayed realistically! Plus Marc is SUCH a cutie. I have a major weak spot for gingers. xD
I'd just like to point out that you're my favorite writer like ever. I don't even know much about Marc Staal and I'm starting to love him. LOL. Can't wait for more!