A Desert Between Us - Comments

The layout was bad, just like what others have said.
But I'm glad that I took the trouble of switching to the default layout because I really liked the story. It was sweet and I can relate about keeping the doors open to keep the air moving. We do that here too. All in all, I thought it was a good job. It made me happy reading it.

This was sweet. =)
I thought it was crazy. I think I would die pretty soon if left in the desert. And not because of no water - actually i don't drink that much to begin with.
One thing I just hate is that these characters are so developed and there are no names. I'm just like, TF?
But the guy was really sweet. I felt bad for him, trapped in a desert, no water, but it was sweet that he was content just being with her and he gave her the last of the water. Honestly, I wouldn't accept it. I couldn't watch him die before me, haha.

I'm not a big fan of the layout, but it was relevant and made sense. =) Good job.

I do adore this story. <3

The only real problem I have with this story is the layout, it made it impossible to read and I had to use default layout to read it. Otherwise, this story was fantastic. Something that was really nice was the fact that the title complimented the story so nicely. I think you did so well with telling a story in 400 words, but leaving the reader satisfied. Told just enough to keep my interest, but didn't over-explain to lose it. This was a really interesting read.

For four hundred words this is a darn good story! It's so cute and sweet and I adored it :)

Like your other short story Don't Think Just Jump, I think this would make a good chapeter story. I really like the characters you had in this story, the guy was a sweet heart.

The spelling and grammer were really good. I would have never been able to come up with a good story like this from two words. You've got a talent for writing, don't give it up. :)

Okay, so the layout for this made it nearly impossible to read. You can't have the text floating over a picture like that- it's inhumane to glasses people like me. I had to use the default layout to make sense of it.

This said, I found the actual story to be pretty engaging, if vague. I enjoyed your descriptions. Some of the lines could probably be compressed into bigger paragraphs, but since this is a very short story/drabble, you might not be interested in editing.

Like the one of your 400-word stories I read, I feel like this would do well as a prologue. It's painful to get interested in characters and them have the encounter with them be so brief. If this is a one-shot for you, then I bet your chaptered stories must be good. I'll have to check them out.

I liked this. I liked the begining and I liked how you ended the story.
Good things about this story
intresting

romantic