This Way to the Hills - Comments

  • florence

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    Hi! :D

    This is great, I love how this story is so... I don't know, ordinary? Or maybe relatable? And yet you make it fun and easy to read. Usually with stories like this I always get the urge to run and hide. But I actually really enjoyed reading this first part. And AHHH now I want to see what happens hehe :)
    February 16th, 2012 at 11:52am
  • Transantlanticism

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    This was pretty good. I like how you describe the way she stabbed him with the pen and how it left a mark. It left me wanting for more near the end. I would like to keep on reading this in the near future. :D
    December 14th, 2011 at 06:51am
  • Evil_Angel

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    I really like this so far. I know we weren't doing a comment swap, but I always LOVE finding new stories to read, and I definitely like the beginning. You give us a glimpse into the past and I liked that. You didn't give away too much making the reader needing to know more. More when you can :)
    December 3rd, 2011 at 06:28pm
  • demure.

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    Oh my god, this is like...so amazing. First off I loved the summary. It was short but at the same time it was enough. The layout was absolutely beautiful, it gave me this feeling I really can't place into words. The story was very well written and your grammar was perfect. It totally drew me in. I said 'wtf' when she stabbed him in his arm @.@ XD.

    I don't know I just love how weird she seems lol. I really want to find out what happened to her. subs <3
    December 3rd, 2011 at 05:36am
  • silk tea.

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    I definitely love the little friendship between the two. And I'm certainly curious as to what's about to happen. Why she disappeared and what not, definitely an interesting story. I was expecting something totally cute-sy and romantic but it looks like this is going to be something completely different. Good work on keeping the readers on their toes. :]
    December 2nd, 2011 at 09:31pm
  • Shea Ryhai

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    I have to admit I chuckled at the friendship, how it was broken up and brought back together (through math no less).

    Geeze - what an ending. I doubt anyone could simply leave this story now - will have to come back for more.
    Of course the obvious question running through my head is 'why did she disappear' - it seems she knew something though when they were kids, so it makes me think illness of some kind :(
    Great start!
    December 1st, 2011 at 06:34pm
  • Julie Black

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    This was very sweet and I'd love to see where it goes! I love big surprise endings like this.

    I thought the dynamic between the two of them was very cute. It was the awkward, young love that starts out even between adults. And I loved how he assumed she would just know what the teacher's shoes because she was a girl.

    This whole thing was a great introduction and you definitely earned my subscription :)
    December 1st, 2011 at 08:16am
  • Sundance Kid.

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    This is actually really amazing. Everything about this is so good. Not a big fan of the layout, but it was readable. The way you started it was simply fantastic. The flow was just great. It really grabbed my interest and I find myself so excited to see what happens next! I can't wait for the next update!
    December 1st, 2011 at 06:21am