Grave Wisdom - Comments

  • wx12

    wx12 (10125)

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    I like stories that begin in action, without a lot of backstory or information to bog a reader down from the beginning. You do that well by introducing concrete ideas like the "whirring" (great word) of the recorde and with direct dialog.

    You really set readers up for the twist in this story with the nonchalant dialog about pills and knifes and all of those things. it's very humorous, in hind sight.
    September 2nd, 2012 at 06:54am
  • musikfan

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    I totally fell for that!!! Haha I must have my revenge...hehehe I love how you put in calc and Muse haha ur two favorite things in the world....besides me :D Loved it!!!
    April 21st, 2012 at 03:00am
  • WhoAmIReally?

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    That was cruel. I really thought she was dieing. Besides that, wonderful story!
    March 4th, 2012 at 07:09am