Mi Vampiro - Comments

I love this idea! Yukki blacking out and her blind rage gave me chills lol you shouldn't rush through the action though, it feels like your rushing in these chapters and you dont have to. The more detail there is the better :) update soon lovely!!!

This is so good lol I like that you used some of my ideas!!! :) update soon k? :)

This is awesome! Well Ideas? Hmmm....

Well you could steam things up between Yukki and Zero! Make Shane and Kaname meet each other! Uh there could be a outing with Zero and Yukki and then they get attacked by artifical ivampires! And then the chapter could end with something surprising like Zero gets kidnapped or someone attacks the school? These are just ideas of course :) Love you!!! ^.^

Ooooh I'm telling Zero!!! He better keep his little grubby lips and hands off of Zero's Yukki!!!! Ugh how dare he just kiss her? Blah! I don't like him. Lol But I did like the update and it's okay that you aren't on your computer as long as you update! :)

AW! I comment every chapter :)

And I think this idea is amazing as long as it's still Vampire Knight of course it should be awesome!!! :) I like the idea of artifical vampires.

Lol this is super good! A few spelling errors but it happens lol You know for someone who says they can't write well you catch my attention just fine! (And I'm a picky reader) :) Please update soon!

Lol didn't we meet Shane in chapter 6? Oh well!!! He's awesome, Zero's the best! And I love this story :)

The story is very good! Although there are small mistakes like: I excepted Kaname fully and what do he do? What does he do? lol ch.1 but I'm sure just reading over your work would do just fine. And you skip from present to past tense a lot (I know it's hard NOT to do seeing as I do it to lol) but it's something we can both work at. Also Skipping to another perspective in the middle of the chapter is confusing especailly when the paragraphs aren't spaced out. And you should start a new one when two people are having a conversation:

"Hello," she grinned.

"Hi," he replied.

Like that hahah :) But these mistakes definitely don't take away the magic from this story! I love Vampire Knight so I was glad and excited to read this...I'm sorry my advice took so long but I had Show Choir camp and haven't even had time to update my story :( But as you see I'm making time today! Because I love you soooooooo much *hugs*.

Lol you also switched to Yukki's perspective when you were in Zero's lol it was confusing but I found my way!!! (ch.3)....I'm writing this as I read btw!

But overall this plot is good and I can't wait to read what happens when Shane and Zero meet! And I double love this story because Zero and Yukki kissed and I love thier relationship, in the anime I rooted for them hahah ^_^ (Let's not talk about my rage at the end Okay?) I love you update soon!

Thanks

Very good home slice...=]